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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v. 105 v.32

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 105 v. 32
The advancement in technology has enabled people to have many options that are available to them. In my opinion, I certainly agree that the more than necessary options can become cumbersome. This problem is encountered in our daily life, for example, when buying a small personal item such as a smartphone or a large ticketed item such as an automobile. To begin with, when buying a smartphone, we have an enormous amount of options to decide which makes us confused, and then within a three to six month period a brand new and more advance version is introduced by all major players, which can easily make us frustrated. For instance, one maker claims more processors than the other, while the other more memory than the former. One supplier would taunt brighter and more colourful display, while the other would claim theirs would take nicer selfie with an advanced front camera. The average consumer becomes overwhelmed by selection process and may end up buying one without a clear understanding. Furthermore, in the case of purchasing a car, many selections are available from a variety of places. Consumers do not only have to decide which one they should buy, but they must choose where they should buy it. For example, many local dealers showcase luxury, sports, and sedan automobiles, which are also available from online distributors. This process can be overwhelming for the buyer and disappoints the owner of a brand new car when their friend or family member reports that they just bought a more popular brand car with better options from a different place with a way lower price. In conclusion, I strongly agree that we have more than the necessary amount of options when making decisions for our daily lives. Because, they confuse us while deciding and make us regret our decisions later when we find out that much better options were available. On the other hand, adequate options can help us to make decisions which could allow us to enjoy our lives.
The advancement in technology has enabled
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people
to have
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
that are
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available
to them. In my opinion, I
certainly
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agree
that the more than necessary
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options
can become cumbersome. This problem
is encountered
in our daily life,
for example
, when buying a
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small
personal item such as a smartphone or a large ticketed item such as an automobile.

To
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begin
with, when buying a smartphone, we have an enormous amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
to decide which
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makes
us confused, and then within a three to
It seems that a hyphen is missing.
six month
period a brand new and more advance version
is introduced
by all major players, which can
easily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
us frustrated.
For instance
, one maker claims more processors than the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
, while the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
more memory than the former. One supplier would taunt brighter and more
Possible spelling mistake. 'colourful' is British English.
colourful
display, while the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
would claim theirs would take nicer selfie with an advanced front camera. The average consumer becomes overwhelmed by selection process and may
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end
up buying one without a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
understanding.

Furthermore
, in the case of purchasing a car,
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many
selections are
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available
from a variety of places. Consumers do not
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only
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have to
decide which one they should
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buy
,
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but
they
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must
choose where they should
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buy
it.
For example
,
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many
local dealers showcase luxury, sports, and sedan automobiles, which are
also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
available
from online distributors. This process can be overwhelming for the buyer and disappoints the owner of a
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
car when their friend or family member reports that they
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just
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bought
a more popular brand car with better
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options
from a
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different
place with a way lower price.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that we have more than the necessary amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
when making decisions for our daily
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lives
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
, they confuse us while deciding and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
us regret our decisions later when we find out that much better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
were
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available
. On the
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other
hand, adequate
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options
can
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help
us to
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make
decisions which could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
us to enjoy our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 105 v. 32

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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