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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v. 103 v.30

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 103 v. 30
In contemporary times, certain people think that they are blessed with multiple choices, while some people do not. Owing to the invention of sophisticated technology, I completely agree with the statement that people these days have numerous options than earlier in the field of education, awareness, for instance. This essay with discuss about how the evolution of technology helped people in providing diverse alternatives, followed by a reasoned conclusion. To embark on, technology is a boon to recent generation and improvements of technology in different areas is an added advantage to them. Though newspapers still exist, people have another option like Google, which has been the best search engine ever without which it is merely impossible to get the worldwide news in seconds with a visual experience. Moreover, people had a huge impact on their lives with social media. For example, the recent COVID-19 pandemic has been popular in social media sites like Facebook, Instagram because of which people are much aware of the deadly disease which was not the case with SAAR and other epidemic diseases, a decade ago. As a result, advancements in technology provided a plethora of solutions. Furthermore, students these days have different ways of improving their knowledge like online classes, distance education, part time studies which is always a bliss to the pupils these days. To exemplify, YouTube also provides multiple learning options for Autodidacts to learn things with a visual experience. Hence, proving the fact that people these days have multiple options to learn new things rather than the only way they had a decade ago, teaching. To conclude, evolution of technology has provided several possibilities to the individuals with much comfort than earlier. However, people have to know how to use technology in an effective way, otherwise there are high chances of becoming prey to the cyber crimes.
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people
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think
that they
are blessed
with multiple choices, while
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some
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people
do not. Owing to the invention of sophisticated
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technology
, I completely
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agree
with the statement that
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people
these days have numerous
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options
than earlier in the field of education, awareness,
for instance
. This essay with
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discuss about how
the evolution of
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technology
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helped
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people
in providing diverse alternatives, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

To embark on,
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technology
is a boon to recent generation and improvements of
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technology
in
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different
areas is an
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added
advantage to them. Though newspapers
still
exist,
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people
have another
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option
like Google, which has been the best search engine ever without which it is
merely
impossible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the worldwide news in seconds with a visual experience.
Moreover
,
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people
had a huge impact on their
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lives
with social media.
For example
, the recent COVID-19 pandemic has been popular in social media sites like Facebook, Instagram
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because
of which
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people
are much aware of the deadly disease which was not the case with SAAR and other epidemic diseases, a decade ago.
As a result
, advancements in
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technology
provided a plethora of solutions.

Furthermore
, students these days have
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different
ways of improving their knowledge like online classes, distance education,
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
part time
studies which is always a bliss to the pupils these days. To exemplify, YouTube
also
provides multiple learning
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options
for Autodidacts to learn things with a visual experience.
Hence
, proving the fact that
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people
these days have multiple
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options
to learn new things
rather
than the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
way they had a decade ago, teaching.

To conclude
, evolution of
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technology
has provided several possibilities to the individuals with much comfort than earlier.
However
,
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people
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have to
know how to
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use
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technology
Consider replacing "in an effective way" with the adverb for "effective"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an effective way
,
otherwise
there are high chances of becoming prey to the cyber crimes.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 103 v. 30

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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