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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.3

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 3
Choices are the spices in life. Some people think that life offers too many choices to people, while others believe that this is not the case. We experience the same climate every year and for this reason I strongly disagree with those who claim that life offers too many options. Those who claim that life gives many options genuinely believe it because they change their outfits everyday. This is to say they look at the wide variety of clothings and accessories in the market and they think these are the main issues of life. For example, they think changing their wristwatches and shoes everyday is the reason we are in this world. This has made them erroneously conclude that life is offering them great choices. However, I agree with those who say life choices are limited because we go through the same cycle of raining and sunny seasons every year. In other words, these climate pattern dictates all we do and does not allow us enjoy certain benefits as could be enjoyed if there were more options. For instance, imagine if we had snow fall sandwiched in between the rainy and sunny seasons in some years and in some other years flowers falling from the sky. That would have been great and would result in revenue for countries where this happens because people will start visiting such places for their vacations. Another good reason is that we basically eat only 6 classes of food. This is not a wide variety because we are basically eating the same thing every time. As an example, if we had 12 or even 20 classes of food, then people will be healthier and live longer. In conclusion, although some people think people have many choices these days, I strongly disagree with their opinion because seeing that there are only fewer classes of food.
Choices
are the spices in
life
.
Some
people
think
that
life
offers too
many
choices
to
people
, while others believe that this is not the case. We experience the same climate every
year
and
for this reason
I
strongly
disagree with those who claim that
life
offers too
many
options.

Those who claim that
life
gives
many
options
genuinely
believe it
because
they
change
their outfits
everyday
. This is to say they look at the wide variety of
clothings
and accessories in the
market and
they
think
these are the main issues of
life
.
For example
, they
think
changing their wristwatches and shoes
everyday
is the reason we are in this world. This has made them
erroneously
conclude that
life
is offering them great choices.

However
, I
agree
with those who say
life
choices
are limited
because
we go through the same cycle of raining and sunny seasons every
year
.
In other words
, these climate pattern dictates all we do and does not
allow
us
enjoy
certain benefits as could
be enjoyed
if there were more options.
For instance
, imagine if we had snow fall sandwiched in between the rainy and sunny seasons in
some
years and in
some
other years flowers falling from the sky. That would have been great and would result in revenue for countries where this happens
because
people
will
start
visiting such places for their vacations. Another
good
reason is that we
basically
eat
only
6 classes of food. This is not a wide variety
because
we are
basically
eating the same thing every time. As an example, if we had 12 or even 20 classes of food, then
people
will be healthier and
live
longer.

In conclusion
, although
some
people
think
people
have
many
choices
these days, I
strongly
disagree with their opinion
because
seeing that there are
only
fewer classes of food.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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