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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v. 102 v.29

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 102 v. 29
These days, several people are convinced that there are many options owned by every person in this world. I personally agree with the statement, because analysing the choice that always exists in people’s lives, such as the preference of a job as well as choosing a life partner or spouse. Firstly, it is a fact that everyone has many choices in everything for making the best judgment so that people can enjoy life more. For instance, to choose a job that is normally applied by some people after graduating from school or university. In addition, they are able to choose which company they want to work for based on several aspects. However, some also prefer to not propose a job to build their own business or build a career as merchants. Secondly, the choice also is found in search for a partner in life. Moreover, the optional could be a list of criteria of soon to be spouse, hence it is very essential to observe more about the partner before marriage. According to current research, people who have a type of life mate and learn about their partner more before marriage, around 75% of them are successful in marriage because they have known each other greatly. However, in some cases, some people find it difficult to figure out their mate because their ideal criteria do not suit their personalities. Taking everything into consideration, I am totally certain that preferences are crucial in people's lives to create decisions precisely. For example, to choose which is better work or a matching partner to make a more valuable life.
These days, several
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people
are convinced
that there are
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many
options
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owned
by every person in this world. I
personally
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agree
with the statement,
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because
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analysing
the choice that always exists in
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people’s
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lives
, such as the preference of a job
as well
as choosing a
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life
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partner
or spouse.

Firstly
, it is a fact that everyone has
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many
choices in everything for making the best judgment
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so
that
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people
can enjoy
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life
more.
For instance
, to choose a job
that is
normally
applied by
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some
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people
after graduating from school or university.
In addition
, they are able to choose which
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company
they want to work for based on several aspects.
However
,
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some
also
prefer to not propose a job to build their
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own
business or build a career as merchants.

Secondly
, the choice
also
is found
in search for a
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partner
in
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life
.
Moreover
, the optional could be a list of criteria of
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soon
to be spouse,
hence
it is
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very
essential to observe more about the
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partner
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before
marriage. According to
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current
research,
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people
who have a type of
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life
mate and learn about their
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partner
more
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before
marriage, around 75% of them are successful in marriage
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because
they have known each other
greatly
.
However
, in
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some
cases,
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some
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people
find it difficult to figure out their mate
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
their ideal criteria do not suit their personalities.

Taking everything into consideration, I am
totally
certain that preferences are crucial in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
to create decisions
precisely
.
For example
, to choose which is better work or a matching
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partner
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a more valuable
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life
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 102 v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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