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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v. 101 v.28

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 101 v. 28
It is argued that people face too many choices nowadays. I disagree with this statement because although there are more options in many aspects, I believe that in most affairs in the modern society, we have to learn to accept. On the one hand, people indeed make more choices than before because it contains more designs in the modern products than that of 30 years ago. This is because there are more manufacturers in the world who produce different kinds of goods and their techniques are advanced every year. For example, phones can be made into different appearances and have different SOCs, companies like Apple, Huawei and Microsoft all have their own modules. More specifically, people can choose their phone from the iPhone 11 Pro Max to the Nokia 100, more than 1000 types. Without those new designs, no one can imagine what he or she could buy in 1990, except several Motorola. On the other hand, I would argue that there are actually a few choices people can make, especially in finance and education. In terms of finances, ordinary people find it hard to buy their own house because of the rising housing prices all over the world. This makes it impossible for them to choose where to live and live with whom, if they want to stay in a big city. For example, a postgraduate student who majors in CS needs to pay more than half of their salary each month to pay for the apartment, and is only able to buy their own with the help of parents. Similarly, children seldom have a chance to choose a dream school because of the many restrictions in today’s world. In conclusion, there are some options people can make but in a relatively small range. In most of the important affairs, ordinary people do not have many choices.
It
is argued
that
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people
face too
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many
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choices
nowadays. I disagree with this statement
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because
although there are more options in
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many
aspects, I believe that in most affairs in the modern society, we
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have to
learn to accept.

On the one hand,
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people
indeed
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make
more
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choices
than
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before
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because
it contains more designs in the modern products than that of 30 years ago. This is
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because
there are more manufacturers in the world who produce
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different
kinds of
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goods
and their techniques
are advanced
every year.
For example
, phones can
be made
into
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different
appearances and have
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different
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SOCs
,
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companies
like Apple, Huawei and Microsoft all have their
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own
modules. More
specifically
,
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people
can choose their phone from the iPhone 11 Pro Max to the Nokia 100, more than 1000 types. Without those new designs, no one can imagine what he or she could
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buy
in 1990, except
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several Motorola
.

On the other hand
, I would argue that there are actually a few
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choices
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people
can
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make
,
especially
in finance and education. In terms of finances, ordinary
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people
find it
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hard
to
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buy
their
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own
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house
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because
of the rising housing prices all over the world. This
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makes
it impossible for them to choose where to
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live
and
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live
with whom, if they want to stay in a
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big
city.
For example
, a postgraduate student who majors in CS needs to pay more than half of their salary each month to pay for the apartment, and is
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only
able to
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buy
their
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own
with the
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help
of parents.
Similarly
, children seldom have a chance to choose a dream school
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because
of the
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many
restrictions in
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today
’s world.

In conclusion
, there are
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some
options
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people
can
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make
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but
in a
relatively
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small
range. In most of the
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important
affairs, ordinary
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people
do not have
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 101 v. 28

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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