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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 2
It is argued by some people that we have a lot more options to choose now than we used to have in the past. This essay completely agrees with the statement because thousands of products are displayed in shops at present and many people think it is difficult to select one from the multiple options. Nowadays, we can find huge shopping malls which stock various products from many different brands and this sometimes makes it difficult for people to pick an item because there are so many options. For instance, about twenty years ago, when people wanted to buy clothes or electronic appliances there were not many options. As a result, they bought whatever was available to them and still they were happy. But today, the consumer is spoilt for choice when they enter a supermarket and as such they have to think many times before zeroing in on a particular product. Worse still, inspite of spending a lot of time comparing the options, they are not satisfied with the purchase because they suspect that the other options could have been better. Choices are available in almost every area of life. For example, nowadays, there are plenty of options for higher studies and students and their parents often struggle to figure out what the right choice is. Even in the case of insurance and medical treatment choices are available in plenty. While the availability of choices is certainly good, the main disadvantage is that it makes the process of choosing difficult. To conclude, people these days certainly have so many choices that they often feel overwhelmed when they shop for something.
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is argued
by
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some
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people
that we have a lot more
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options
to choose
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now
than we
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used
to have in the past. This essay completely
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agrees
with the statement
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because
thousands of products
are displayed
in shops at present and
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many
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people
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think
it is difficult to select one from the multiple options.

Nowadays, we can find huge shopping malls which stock various products from
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many
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different
brands and this
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sometimes
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makes
it difficult for
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people
to pick an item
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because
there are
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so
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many
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options
.
For instance
, about twenty years ago, when
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people
wanted to
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buy
clothes or electronic appliances there were not
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many
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options
.
As a result
, they
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bought
whatever was available to them and
still
they were happy.
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But
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today
, the consumer is
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spoilt
for
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choice
when they enter a supermarket and as such they
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have to
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think
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many
times
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before
zeroing in on a particular product. Worse
still
,
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inspite
of spending
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a lot of
time comparing the
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options
, they are not satisfied with the
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purchase
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because
they suspect that the other
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options
could have been better.

Choices are available in almost every area of life.
For example
, nowadays, there are
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plenty
of
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options
for higher studies and students and their parents
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often
struggle to figure out what the right
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choice
is. Even in the case of insurance and medical treatment
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choices
are available in
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plenty
. While the availability of
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choices
is
certainly
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good
, the main disadvantage is that it
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makes
the process of choosing difficult.

To conclude
,
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people
these days
certainly
have
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so
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
that they
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often
feel overwhelmed when they shop for something.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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