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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.19

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 19
It is considered by a few people that these days a huge number of options surround us. I partially agree with this statement, no doubt there are numerous options, an individual can avail in today's world of progress, but I think resources for a person also play a prestigious role in helping someone to select an option. In this modern era of time, the world has progressed a lot that any individual has various options to select if that individual has some know-how and experience in the related field. These ways are not restricted to any particular field, although every field has its own scope and way anyone can adopt. For instance, people related to the business field could make progress by adapting different ways if they are well-experienced. Similarly, students at their career selection stage also have many choices in selecting the category of their education. Besides having many tacks for peoplel, resources also help a lot in selecting that route or track. These resources may include the resource of time, the resource of money, the resource of health and many more. Considering the example that a student has a passion to become a doctor, but his/her parents are not able to handle the expenses of private university or a man is keen to start a business, but he does not have good health and any good workers to help him in that business so these factors hinder the way towards selecting the choices. It can be concluded that life gives many paths to a person, but it depends on a person to avail or selects a competitive way out of many to have success in his life. A person has to identify the path based on available resources and need of the time.
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is considered
by a few
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people
that these days a huge number of options surround us. I
partially
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agree
with this statement, no doubt there are numerous options, an individual can avail in
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today
's world of progress,
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but
I
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think
resources for a
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person
also
play a prestigious role in helping someone to select an option.

In this modern era of time, the world has progressed a lot that any individual has various options to select if that individual has
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some
know-how and experience in the related
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field
. These
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ways
are not restricted to any particular
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field
, although every
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field
has its
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own
scope and
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way
anyone can adopt.
For instance
,
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people
related to the business
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field
could
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make
progress by adapting
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different
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ways
if they are well-experienced.
Similarly
, students at their career selection stage
also
have
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many
choices in selecting the category of their education.

Besides
having
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many
tacks for
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peoplel
, resources
also
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help
a lot in selecting that route or
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track
. These resources may include the
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resource
of time, the
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resource
of money, the
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resource
of health and
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many
more. Considering the example that a student has a passion to become a doctor,
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but
his/her parents are not able to handle the expenses of private university or a
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man
is keen to
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start
a business,
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but
he does not have
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good
health and any
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good
workers to
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help
him in that business
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so
these factors hinder the
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way
towards selecting the choices.

It can
be concluded
that life gives
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many
paths to a
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person
,
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but
it depends on a
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person
to avail or selects a competitive
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way
out of
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many
to have success in his life. A
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person
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has to
identify the path based on available resources and need of the time.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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