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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.18

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 18
Although it is thought by some that recently people's choice has increased tremendously. In my opinion, I agree that in recent times people have varieties of choice to make. A good reason for too many choices being made by people is as a result of effectiveness and quality of the products or services rendered to the public. However, most companies do not consider the people's needs therefore, they are only after their profits hence, producing goods in quantity and not considering the quality of the products being produced. This results to people devaluing the products or services, thereby, trying to make different choices inorder to meet up to their target. For instance, most items or services being rendered to the public, at the end if people are not encouraged with the services or goods, most people can easily switch to another. Another reason to consider is that most of the items or services rendered is very expensive. Moreover, consumers usually accesses the products or services they want to purchase, thereby, checking for the quality of the products and if eventually, the cost of the products does not worth it, people therefore, makes a different choice. Lastly, people have too many choices when the services they intend using is not delivering properly to their satisfaction, even after the expenses made. For instance, most people prefer receiving health treatment in government facilities because they believe that most expert health professionals such as, surgeons, nurses, medical laboratory scientist and so on are all employed in government facilities. In conclusion, individuals can have varieties of choices to make if their needs are not properly met or are not really satisfied on the products purchased.
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choice
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agree
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people
have varieties of
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choice
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make
.

A
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good
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choices
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by
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people
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is
as a result
of effectiveness and quality of the
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products
or
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services
rendered to the public.
However
, most
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companies
do not consider the
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people
's needs
therefore
, they are
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only
after their profits
hence
, producing
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goods
in quantity and not considering the quality of the
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products
being produced
. This results to
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people
devaluing the
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products
or
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services
, thereby, trying to
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make
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different
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choices
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up to their target.
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, most items or
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services
being rendered
to the public, at the
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if
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people
are not encouraged with the
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services
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goods
, most
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can
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Another reason to consider is that most of the items or
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rendered is
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usually
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products
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services
they want to
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purchase
, thereby, checking for the quality of the
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products
and if
eventually
, the cost of the
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products
does not worth it,
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people
therefore
,
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makes
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different
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Lastly
,
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people
have too
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many
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choices
when the
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services
they intend using is not delivering
properly
to their satisfaction, even after the expenses made.
For instance
, most
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people
prefer receiving health treatment in
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government
facilities
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because
they believe that most expert health professionals such as, surgeons, nurses, medical laboratory scientist and
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so
on are all employed in
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government
facilities.

In conclusion
, individuals can have varieties of
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choices
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
if their needs are not
properly
met or are not
really
satisfied on the
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products
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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