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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.16

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 16
In today’s globalization, the advancement in technology has enabled people to have many options. In my opinion, I certainly agree with the point of having vast options. The availability of a variety of opportunities has given people a wide-angle to accept in their life will be briefed further. When buying a car, many types are available for purchase from a variety of ways. Consumers do not only have to decide which one they should buy, but they must choose where they should buy their next dream automobile. For example, many local dealers showcase luxury, sports, and sedan cars, which are also available from online distributors. This process can be overwhelming for that buyer and frustrates the owner of this brand new car when their friend or family member reports that they just bought a more popular brand car with better options from a different place with a way lower price. Furthermore, people nowadays have a wide range of foreign destinations to select from for their vacation. In many countries, visa on arrival made individual hassle-free while holidaying. Moreover, many countries also offer visa-free travel to their nation for promoting tourism, which also gives people a lifetime opportunity to avail. For instance, Japan has a policy for international tourists in which they provide visa on arrival, and for Phuket visa is not required for the tourers. I would pen down, to strongly agree with many options available to secure from irrespective of choices.
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today
’s globalization, the advancement in technology has enabled
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people
to have
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many
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options
. In my opinion, I
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agree
with the point of having vast
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options
. The availability of a variety of opportunities has
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given
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people
a wide-angle to accept in their life will
be briefed
further
.

When buying a
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car
,
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many
types are available for
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purchase
from a variety of ways. Consumers do not
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only
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have to
decide which one they should
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buy
,
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but
they
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must
choose where they should
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buy
their
next
dream automobile.
For example
,
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many
local dealers showcase luxury, sports, and sedan
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cars
, which are
also
available from online distributors. This process can be overwhelming for that buyer and frustrates the owner of this
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brand new
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car
when their friend or family member reports that they
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just
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bought
a more popular brand
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car
with better
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options
from a
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different
place with a way lower price.

Furthermore
,
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people
nowadays have a wide range of foreign destinations to select from for their vacation. In
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many
countries, visa on arrival made individual hassle-free while holidaying.
Moreover
,
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many
countries
also
offer visa-free travel to their nation for promoting tourism, which
also
gives
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people
a lifetime opportunity to avail.
For instance
, Japan has a policy for international tourists in which they provide visa on arrival, and for Phuket visa is not required for the
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tourers
.

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strongly
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agree
with
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options
available to secure from irrespective of choices.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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