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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.15

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 15
It is argued that some folks think that there are many options to choose in life, currently. It depends on a person’s status, which can lead to many or less pathways. There are many categories of things to choose from. It all depends upon what someone wants. Nowadays, from careers to personal lifestyles to technology related stuff, I agree there are many considerable things. For example; a doctor has many sub-specialities to choose from, compared to the past decade. If a doctor has completed 2 years in FCPS Medicine training, over here in Pakistan, he is then given a choice whether to become a General Physician/Internal Medicine Specialist or opt for further sub-specialities like Gastroenterology, Cardiology, Dermatology, etc. In the past decade such options wouldn’t have been available. To add to this, there are even super-specialities as well, after completing FCPS training in a particular subject. Say a person has completed training in FCPS Internal Medicine, then his super-speciality options would be Gastroenterology, Dermatology, Cardiology, etc. There are limitations when it comes to choices, if someone is not competent enough, especially career wise. He won’t have much fishes in his pond to catch. For example; an incompetent actor won’t be offered many movies, thus he would have limited scripts to select from. He won’t have many fans. He won’t be popular. Hence, it will tough for him to get what he wants, mainly due to less opportunities. In conclusion, competence attracts too many options, but incompetence repels it.
It
is argued
that
some
folks
think
that there are
many
options
to choose in life,
currently
. It depends on a person’s status, which can lead to
many
or
less
pathways.

There are
many
categories of things to choose from. It all depends upon what someone wants. Nowadays, from careers to personal lifestyles to technology related stuff, I
agree
there are
many
considerable things.
For example
; a doctor has
many
sub-specialities to choose from, compared to the past decade. If a doctor has completed 2 years in
FCPS
Medicine training, over here in Pakistan, he is then
given
a choice whether to become a General Physician/Internal Medicine Specialist or opt for
further
sub-specialities like Gastroenterology, Cardiology, Dermatology, etc. In the past decade such
options
wouldn’t have been available. To
add
to this, there are even super-specialities
as well
, after completing
FCPS
training in a particular subject. Say a person has completed training in
FCPS
Internal Medicine, then his
super-speciality
options
would be Gastroenterology, Dermatology, Cardiology, etc.

There are limitations when it
comes
to choices, if someone is not competent
enough
,
especially
career wise. He won’t have
much
fishes in his pond to catch.
For example
; an incompetent actor won’t
be offered
many
movies,
thus
he would have limited scripts to select from. He won’t have
many
fans. He won’t be popular.
Hence
, it will tough for him to
get
what he wants,
mainly
due to
less
opportunities.

In conclusion
, competence attracts too
many
options
,
but
incompetence repels it.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 15

Essay
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248 words
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