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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.12

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 12
There is a commonly heard response to the following situations: While deciding where to dine, when picking up an outfit for tomorrow, or in front of assorted commodities, we often say or hear “I’m having a hard time deciding …”. Are there actually too many choices? I would strongly agree with the statement arguing that people living in the modern world are exposed to too many choices. Take clothing as an example, in the past, people wear clothes only to cover their body parts, prevent them from cold or any harm from the environment. Now, we define our own styles from what we wear. There are numerous of clothing brands launched every single day. You can choose from fabrics to colours, from places of manufacture to places for sale (online or at a physical store). Buying a new pair of jeans can be a stressful task if you have no idea which shape, what colour, in which price range you want, as you may be facing thousands of options. Not only physical commodities are with excessive alternatives, but intangible things such as education or exercises, are with exaggerated choices. Speaking of learning a new language, we take online courses, home school by using plenty of different tools and apps or enrol in a language training class at a community college. Just by naming the various ways of learning, we can see that people nowadays are exposed to too many choices. In conclusion, while saying “we have too many choices nowadays”doesn’t imply that it is a wrong or bad thing. It is just to say that people are given with the opportunity of making plentiful decisions on one thing. Under that circumstances, it is important that we minimize the time in choosing between alternatives and measure each possibility with a degree, so that, we can benefit the most from this world full of massive choices.
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commonly
heard response to the following situations: While deciding where to dine, when picking up an outfit for tomorrow, or in front of assorted commodities, we
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often
say or hear “I’m having a
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hard
time deciding …”. Are there actually too
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
? I would
strongly
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agree
with the statement arguing that
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people
living in the modern world
are exposed
to too
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many
choices.

Take clothing as an example, in the past,
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people
wear clothes
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only
to cover their body parts,
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prevent
them from
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cold
or any harm from the environment.
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Now
, we define our
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own
styles from what we wear. There are numerous of clothing brands launched every single day. You can choose from fabrics to
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colours
, from places of manufacture to places for sale (online or at a physical store). Buying a new pair of jeans can be a stressful task if you have no
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idea
which shape, what
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colour
, in which price range you want, as you may be facing thousands of options.

Not
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only
physical commodities are with excessive alternatives,
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but
intangible things such as education or exercises, are with exaggerated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
. Speaking of learning a new language, we take online courses, home school by using
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plenty
of
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different
tools and apps or enrol in a language training
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class
at a community college.
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Just
by naming the various ways of learning, we can
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see
that
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people
nowadays
are exposed
to too
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many
choices.

In conclusion
, while saying “we have too
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many
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choices
nowadays
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”doesn
’t imply that it is a
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wrong
or
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bad
thing. It is
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just
to say that
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people
are
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given
with the opportunity of making plentiful decisions on one thing. Under that circumstances, it is
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important
that we minimize the time in choosing between alternatives and measure each possibility with a degree,
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so
that, we can benefit the most from this world full of massive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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