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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statement? v.10

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. to this statement? v. 10
is considered that in this day and age, as people, we have too many options available for everything. In my opinion, I agree that we have a long list to make our selection from. This essay discusses about the endless choices we have, right from our basic necessities to the luxurious needs. Food is one the primary needs of human beings, however we have too many options available for this basic necessity as well. The wide variety is available for people of all age groups, including toddlers. In olden days, baby food was simply made at home from the ingredients available in the kitchen. While, today we have departmental stores full of baby food. There are hundreds of restaurants within the same city with countless cuisines on the one single menu. This situation is a consequence of globalization. To illustrate, Chinese people have migrated to all the corners of the people, resulting in availability of chinese cuisine anywhere and everywhere. Hence, we have too many choices for our basic needs. Moreover, gold and diamonds are ought to be the most expensive needs of the hour. Still, we have numerous variety to choose from. These are available in different forms, like exclusive jewelry, wrist watches, pens and so on, which are made up of gold and diamonds. In addition, currently any part of the world is easily reachable. Therefore, people have numberless holiday destinations to choose from, which at times results in stress. For instance, a family of five adults wish to indulge themselves in an exotic vacation, however each family member desires for a different destination due to infinite travel destinations. Consequently, resulting in conflicts between the family member. From the above illustrations, it is certainly clear, that recently we have too many choices. In conclusion, I concur that we have a plethora of choices in today’s world, and I am certainly sure that, that the availability of options will keep on increasing in the near future.
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is
considered that in this day and age, as
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people
, we have too
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many
options
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available
for everything. In my opinion, I
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agree
that we have a long list to
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make
our selection from. This essay
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discusses about the
endless choices we have, right from our
Consider using "necessities".
basic necessities
to the luxurious needs.

Food is
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one
the primary needs of human beings,
however
we have too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
options
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available
for this basic necessity
as well
. The wide variety is
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available
for
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people
of all age groups, including toddlers. In olden days, baby food was
simply
made at home from the ingredients
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available
in the kitchen.
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While
,
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today
we have departmental stores full of baby food. There are hundreds of restaurants within the same city with countless cuisines on the one single menu. This situation is a consequence of globalization. To illustrate, Chinese
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people
have migrated to all the corners of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, resulting in availability of
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chinese
cuisine anywhere and everywhere.
Hence
, we have too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
choices for our basic needs.

Moreover
, gold and diamonds are ought to be the most expensive needs of the hour.
Still
, we have numerous variety to choose from. These are
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available
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
forms, like exclusive jewelry, wrist
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watches
, pens and
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so
on, which
are made
up of gold and diamonds.
In addition
,
currently
any part of the world is
easily
reachable.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have numberless holiday destinations to choose from, which at times results in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
.
For instance
, a family of five adults wish to indulge themselves in an exotic vacation,
however
each family member desires for a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
destination due to infinite travel destinations.
Consequently
, resulting in conflicts between the family member. From the above illustrations, it is
certainly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
, that recently we have too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
choices.

In conclusion
, I concur that we have a plethora of choices in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
’s world, and I am
certainly
sure that, that the availability of options will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
on increasing in the near future.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. to this statement? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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