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Some people believe nowadays that we have too many choices. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.1

Some people believe nowadays that we have too many choices. with this statement. v. 1
Some people argue that we have a lot of options these days. I agree with this statement completely as compared to the past, we have so many choices to select for education, entertainment and shopping. Nowadays, when the students have so many choices to select the field of study. Compared to the past when students had to select either science or Arts subjects, now even arts has so many subspecialties and so has science. Amongst the science, medical, engineering and several biosciences are available which leave the students with so many choices that it becomes difficult to select between them. This has proven so beneficial that the students have a myriad of options to select whichever tempts them. The Field of entertainment has so many options these days. This includes physical as well non physical entertainment. Whenever one goes back after tiring day at the office, we can browse through so many entertainment channels. There are separate movie, musical and documentary channels which one can enjoy. The availability of Netflix has added to the diversity of options which can be enjoyed at any convenient time. They can be watched at any time one wants compared to the past where people had to wait for weeks to watch the next episode and if missed there was no alternative available. Moreover, we experience so many options when we go shopping. There are multiple brands of jeans in various price groups. One can see expensive jeans in thousands of dollars as well as cheap ones worth few bugs. In conclusion, I completely agree that in the modern era we are provided with may options in every aspect of life.
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argue that we have
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these days. I
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agree
with this statement completely as compared to the past, we have
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choices to
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for education, entertainment and shopping.

Nowadays, when the
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students
have
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choices to
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the field of study. Compared to the past when
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students
had to
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select
either science or Arts subjects,
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now
even arts has
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so
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many
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subspecialties
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has science. Amongst the science, medical, engineering and several biosciences are available which
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leave
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students
with
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so
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many
choices that it becomes difficult to
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select
between them. This has proven
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so
beneficial that the
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students
have a myriad of
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options
to
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select
whichever tempts them.

The Field of entertainment has
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so
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many
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these days. This includes physical
as well
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non physical
entertainment. Whenever one goes back after tiring day at the office, we can browse through
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so
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many
entertainment channels. There are separate
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movie
, musical and documentary channels which one can enjoy. The availability of Netflix has
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added
to the diversity of
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options
which can
be enjoyed
at any convenient time. They can be
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watched
at any time one wants
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compared
to the past where
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people
had to wait for weeks to
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watch
the
next
episode and if missed there was no alternative available.
Moreover
, we experience
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so
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
when we go shopping. There are multiple brands of jeans in various price groups. One can
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see
expensive jeans in thousands of dollars
as well
as
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cheap
ones worth few bugs.

In conclusion
, I completely
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agree
that in the modern era we
are provided
with may
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options
in every aspect of life.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe nowadays that we have too many choices. with this statement. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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