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Living in country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement v.1

Living in country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems with this statement v. 1
Many people living in a foreign country for the better life and environment. Moving to new countries can cause serious issues in social and in practical life. So, I agree with the statement. But, these problems can be resolved with the passage of time through their cultures and technology. First of all, elaborate about the social problems which are the most common one whenever you move to the abroad because their cultures are entirely different from them. People do not have an ability to make new friends to completely integrate with them through conversation. Not being able to make new acquaintances, but they are also not capable to persuade their managers in their work. For instance, if they would like to go for shopping, most of them do not know how they could buy something. Only one thing is essential to make their social life better listen more that language to make the grip over it. The other issue is that most of the immigrants face difficulties in a practical scenario. They are not familiar with different locations, so mostly they suffer to find new places. For example, if a person wants to order something from the online platform, but, unfortunately, he is not having the ability to comprehend his talk to the salesperson. However, the appropriate use of technology will help them to overcome these difficulties. To conclude, many people spend their lives in different countries. They face there some social as well as practical issues, but most of the humans overcome these problems in a short period of time through technology and conversation with native speakers on a daily basis.
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people
living in a foreign country for the better life and environment. Moving to
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new
countries can cause serious issues in
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social
and in practical life.
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So
, I
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agree
with the statement.
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But
, these problems can
be resolved
with the passage of time through their cultures and technology.

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, elaborate about the
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social
problems which are the most common one whenever you
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move
to the abroad
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because
their cultures are
entirely
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different
from them.
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People
do not have an ability to
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make
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new
friends to completely integrate with them through conversation. Not being able to
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make
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new
acquaintances,
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but
they are
also
not capable to persuade their managers in their work.
For instance
, if they would like to go for shopping, most of them do not know how they could
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buy
something.
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one thing is essential to
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make
their
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social
life better listen more that language to
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make
the grip over it.

The other issue is that most of the immigrants face difficulties in a practical scenario. They are not familiar with
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different
locations,
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so
mostly
they suffer to find
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new
places.
For example
, if a person wants to order something from the online platform,
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but
, unfortunately, he is not having the ability to comprehend his talk to the salesperson.
However
, the appropriate
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use
of technology will
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help
them to overcome these difficulties.

To conclude
,
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many
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people
spend their
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lives
in
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different
countries. They face there
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some
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social
as well
as practical issues,
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but
most of the humans overcome these problems in a short period of time through technology and conversation with native speakers on a daily basis.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems with this statement v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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