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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign languga can cause serious social problems, as well as pratical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign languga can cause serious social problems, as well as pratical problems. with this statement? v. 2
In the modern world with the expeditious pace of the globalization, more and more people can live, study and work abroad. Some people think that this cause some solemn problems in society when communication by using foreign language. i partly agree with this statement. In this essay, i would like to mention about the negative and positive of speaking other language when living in other country. On the one hand, living aboard bring us a large number of advantages. Firstly, we can widen knowledge about new culture, new lifestyle, new customs, . . . and discovery new things that we have never known before. Secondly, this is not help we widen knowledge but also give them more chances to make international friends from that our relationship will be more extensive. For instance, you are a study aboard student in Finland and you can speak both English and Finnish, it is easy for you to make friend with native and international people. Finally, when you study a new language, you will help more opportunities to advance in the future, more language more successes, so that it is convenient for you to contact fluently with foreign people. Nevertheless, the coin has two sides and this is not an exception. On the other hand, speaking a language that is not our mother language also bring us some disadvantages. First of all, linguistic difference can cause some troubles in society involve relationships, taboos, customs, . . . . For example, if you go to Korea to study, they are speak Korean, that will be a distance between you and your friends, you can be feel isolated, or if you have a cross-cultural marriage, you may have a strict forbiddance by your parents-in-law. The next problem is that you can be misunderstood in the way that you communicate with indigenous people, maybe because of the voice that some native people can not understand. And last but not least, in all my truthfulness, there are still exist the discrimination in some nations between immigrants and native people, especially at working and studying environment. For instance, student can be bulled by their classmate because of the difference about language and country. In conclusion, living and talking a foreign language bring you a lot of intriguing experiences but also cause some troubles. If you want to gain the success, at first you have to win yourself, be stronger and be independent to cope with all problems that you will face whilst living abroad.
In the modern world with the expeditious pace of the globalization, more and more
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people
can
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live
,
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study
and work abroad.
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Some
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people
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think
that this cause
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some
solemn problems in society when communication by using foreign
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language
.
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i
partly
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agree
with this statement. In this essay,
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i
would like to
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mention about the
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negative
and
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positive
of speaking other
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language
when
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living
in other country.

On the one hand,
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living
aboard bring us
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a large number of
advantages.
Firstly
, we can widen knowledge about
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new
culture,
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new
lifestyle,
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new
customs
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, .
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.
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.
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and
discovery
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new
things that we have never known
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before
.
Secondly
, this is not
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help
we widen knowledge
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but
also
give them more chances to
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make
international friends from that our relationship will be more extensive.
For instance
, you are a
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study
aboard student in Finland and you can speak both English and Finnish, it is easy for you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
friend with native and international
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people
.
Finally
, when you
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study
a
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new
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language
, you will
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help
more opportunities to advance in the future, more
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language
more successes,
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so
that it is convenient for you to contact
fluently
with foreign
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people
.
Nevertheless
, the coin has two sides and this is not an exception.

On the other hand
, speaking a
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language
that is
not our mother
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language
also
bring us
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some
disadvantages.
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First of all
, linguistic difference can cause
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some
troubles in society involve relationships, taboos, customs
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, .
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.
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.
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.
For example
, if you go to Korea to
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study
, they are
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speak
Korean, that will be a distance between you and your friends, you can be
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feel
isolated, or if you have a cross-cultural marriage, you may have a strict
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forbiddance
by your parents-in-law. The
next
problem is that you can be misunderstood in the way that you communicate with indigenous
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people
, maybe
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because
of the voice that
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some
native
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people
can not understand. And last
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but
not least, in all my truthfulness, there are
still
exist the discrimination in
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some
nations between immigrants and native
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people
,
especially
at working and studying environment.
For instance
, student can
be bulled
by their classmate
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because
of the difference about
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language
and country.

In conclusion
,
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living
and talking a foreign
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language
bring you
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a lot of
intriguing experiences
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but
also
cause
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some
troubles. If you want to gain the success, at
first
you
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have to
win yourself, be stronger and be independent to cope with all problems that you will face whilst
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living
abroad.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign languga can cause serious social problems, as well as pratical problems. with this statement? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
415 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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