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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.48

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement? v. 48
Due to the globalization, it would be beneficial for the person to be a multi-lingual. This will certainly create a mooted issue that by using a different language for the communication creates the detrimental impact on the society and trouble to understand it during usage. I disharmonise with this and arguments are given in the following paragraphs. To begin with, the predominate reason for the against this is that person’s growth would be sabotage as using only their traditional language. By doing this it would not be possible to contact with a person who are living in other nation on the globe. Although, they are just following their own trend and beliefs, they are suffering from knowledge depth about the various cultures and technology they were using. As a result, they feel illiterate and not able to stand with other nation also. For example, in the past in India people were too much rigid about their culture, so they force to follow them as time passes, they found they were lacking in their development. Thus, they started to use the other nation’s language which helps their individual and the nation economy growth. On the other hand, some think it would be difficult, precarious to adopt a new language. However, as a person who start to learn new language understand their own language concept in brief. Even by doing practices one should become a master on it. In this way, this helps an individual to increase their capability and confidence which helps them in the later future. Furthermore, this will also exceed the important skills such as interpersonal skills which helps them in their job also. For instance, research conduct shows that the person who is multilingual becomes dynamic and able to handle any time of situation in their life. In conclusion, having an enlightenment of a foreign language helps to expand their abilities and improves their style of living. Although, this will also help the community and nation growth as well. The government should encourage the programs which demand the multiple languages.
Due to the globalization, it would be beneficial for the
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person
to be
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a multi-lingual
. This will
certainly
create a mooted issue that by using a
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different
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language
for the communication creates the detrimental impact on the society and trouble to understand it during usage. I
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disharmonise
with this and arguments are
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given
in the following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, the predominate reason for the against this is that
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person’s
growth would be sabotage as using
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only
their traditional
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language
. By doing this it would not be possible to contact with a
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person
who are living in
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other
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nation
on the globe. Although, they are
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just
following their
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own
trend and beliefs, they are suffering from knowledge depth about the various cultures and technology they were using.
As a result
, they feel illiterate and not able to stand with
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other
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nation
also
.
For example
, in the past in India
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people
were too much rigid about their culture,
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so
they force to follow them as time passes, they found they were lacking in their development.
Thus
, they
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started
to
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use
the
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other
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nation’s
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language
which
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helps
their individual and the
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nation
economy growth.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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think
it would be difficult, precarious to adopt a new
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language
.
However
, as a
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person
who
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start
to learn new
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language
understand their
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own
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language
concept
in brief
. Even by doing practices one should become a master on it. In this way, this
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helps
an individual to increase their capability and confidence which
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helps
them in the later future.
Furthermore
, this will
also
exceed the
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important
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skills
such as interpersonal
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skills
which
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helps
them in their job
also
.
For instance
, research conduct
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shows
that the
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person
who is
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multilingual
becomes dynamic and able to handle any time of situation in their life.

In conclusion
, having an enlightenment of a foreign
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language
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helps
to expand their abilities and
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improves
their style of living. Although, this will
also
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help
the community and
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nation
growth
as well
. The
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government
should encourage the programs which demand the multiple
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languages
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement? v. 48

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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