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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.33

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement. v. 33
In this modern era, the number of people who migrate from their motherlands to another homey in order to study abroad or apply for a job is increasing. These people may face some serious social and practical problems and may have difficulties to deal with them. Personally, I disagree with this notion, because in my view, although this is a huge change for an individual who has never been far from their countries and families, it has some benefits for them as well and they will get adjusted to it easily. It is said that people that went abroad have had some problems with adjusting the new environment and the new culture, however, most of the time these people can address these problems after being there a while. I think humans are very flexible. Therefore, they can adjust themselves to a new place as soon as possible. When an individual migrates to another provincial everything is unfamiliar to them ranging from the streets to the culture of the country. They may become home sick and even want to return to their motherland. From my point of view, if you are not strong enough when you go abroad the problems can arise and then it becomes so hard to tackle them especially when your family is away. But I believe that by meeting new people, learning the culture of the country and making good friends people can adjust to their new place and enjoy it. In conclusion, however migration is a tough situation and being with people who do not speak your mother tongue is not very convenient, I believe that this is a really good experience.
In this modern era, the number of
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people
who migrate from their motherlands to another homey in order to study abroad or apply for a job is increasing. These
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people
may face
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some
serious social and practical
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problems
and may have difficulties to deal with them.
Personally
, I disagree with this notion,
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because
in my view, although this is a huge
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change
for an individual who has never been far from their countries and families, it has
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some
benefits for them as
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well and
they will
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get
adjusted to it
easily
.

It
is said
that
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people
that went abroad have had
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some
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problems
with adjusting the
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new
environment and the
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new
culture,
however
, most of the time these
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people
can address these
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problems
after being there a while. I
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think
humans are
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very
flexible.
Therefore
, they can adjust themselves to a
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new
place as
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soon
as possible.
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When
an individual migrates to another provincial everything is unfamiliar to them ranging from the streets to the culture of the country. They may become home sick and even want to return to their motherland.

From my point of view, if you are not strong
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enough
when you go abroad the
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problems
can arise and then it becomes
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so
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hard
to tackle them
especially
when your family is away.
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But
I believe that by meeting
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new
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people
, learning the culture of the country and making
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good
friends
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people
can adjust to their
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new
place and enjoy it.

In conclusion
,
however
migration is a tough situation and being with
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people
who do not speak your mother tongue is not
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very
convenient, I believe that this is a
really
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good
experience.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement. v. 33

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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