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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.3

As well as practical problems, living in a foreign country where you must speak their own languages can lead a social gap between you and other people who live there. I completely agree with this opinion. This essay is going to focus on the reasons of this situation. Initially, language is the most important tool to communicate and live with other people together. Even if people can understand each others with speaking a foreign language, they are not able to explain their feelings opinions like their mother tongue. Idioms, sayings and other stories particularly based on the different language make harder to understand foreign people feelings emotions. Therefore, these people can not enjoy while socializing with others or also indigenous people cannot seen these people like a local one. As a result, important social problems occur between local and foreign people who live in the country. Looking at the samples, Turkish people who live in the Germany are the most suitable examples to show main problems. Germany invited Turkish people to their country for work force. These people suffered a lot pain from social subjects because they were not able to socialized with German people because of the difference of languages. Even they were taught how to speak German, the social gap between them has always happened in the cafe, park, even schools. This used to affect people happiness and effectiveness in the life. As a result, government established new residential zones in the Germany, and then these people were able to live much happier. To sum up, people living in a foreign country encounter some social problems, as well as practical problems. In my view, this is absolutely correct because the language is the most fundamental tool to be harmony with others
As well
as practical
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, living in a
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foreign
country where you
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own
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languages
can lead a
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social
gap between you and
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other
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people
who
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live
there. I completely
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agree
with this opinion. This essay is going to focus on the reasons of this situation.

Initially
,
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language
is the most
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important
tool to communicate and
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live
with
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other
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people
together. Even if
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people
can understand each others with speaking a
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foreign
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language
, they are not able to
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explain
their feelings opinions like their mother tongue. Idioms, sayings and
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other
stories
particularly
based on the
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different
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language
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make
harder to understand
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foreign
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people
feelings emotions.
Therefore
, these
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people
can not enjoy while socializing with others or
also
indigenous
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people
cannot
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seen
these
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people
like a local one.
As a result
,
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important
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social
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problems
occur between local and
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foreign
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people
who
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live
in the country.

Looking at the samples, Turkish
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people
who
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live
in the Germany are the most suitable examples to
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show
main
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problems
. Germany invited Turkish
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people
to their country for work force. These
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people
suffered
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a lot pain
from
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social
subjects
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because
they were not able to socialized with German
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people
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because
of the difference of
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languages
. Even they
were taught
how to speak German, the
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social
gap between them has always happened in the
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cafe
, park, even schools. This
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used
to affect
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people
happiness and effectiveness in the life.
As a result
,
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government
established new residential zones in the Germany, and then these
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people
were able to
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live
much happier.

To sum up,
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people
living in a
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foreign
country encounter
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some
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social
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problems
,
as well
as practical
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problems
. In my view, this is
absolutely
correct
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because
the
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language
is the most fundamental tool to be harmony with
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IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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