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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.28

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement? v. 28
In this globalized society, many people migrate to foreign country. They may feel challenging with speaking foreign language. While I do admit that this could be a problem for the first few weeks, in my opinion, however, their ability will be improved by putting a lot of efforts. There is no doubt in my mind that it would be difficult for people to converse with locals without using their mother tongue. Meanings expression correctly is a worry, besides, language misunderstanding is also a problem. Apart from this, work is another salient issue. If people are in a lack of the language, most of the situations is that they cannot apply high-paid jobs. Those problems can further influence mental health, including heavy stress and depression. Nevertheless, I do believe that foreign language can be learnt as long as putting effort. In addition, when people stay in an environment full of the language, it can force them to learn it quickly. The reason is that people are scared when they are in an unfamiliar place, so they would tend to adapt in the new environment quickly. This would give them a motivation learning foreign language. Furthermore, there are over 70% people can speak English in the world. Even when you are in the countries that are less people use English, such as Japan, China or Korea. You can still find people who can speak and even express what they want to say in English. As a result, there is no need to worry about those problems in a long term. In conclusion, I only partly agree with the statement in question. Although people would face some problems when they are using foreign language in other countries, but if they try hard to learn, they can overcome those difficulties.
In this globalized society,
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many
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people
migrate to
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foreign
country. They may feel challenging with speaking
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foreign
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language
. While I do admit that this could be a
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problem
for the
first
few weeks, in my opinion,
however
, their ability will be
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improved
by putting
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a lot of
efforts.

There is no doubt in my mind that it would be difficult for
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people
to converse with locals without using their mother tongue. Meanings expression
correctly
is a worry,
besides
,
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language
misunderstanding is
also
a
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problem
. Apart from this, work is another salient issue. If
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people
are in a lack of the
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language
, most of the situations is that they cannot apply high-paid jobs. Those
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problems
can
further
influence mental health, including heavy
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stress
and depression.

Nevertheless
, I do believe that
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foreign
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language
can be
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learnt
as long as putting effort.
In addition
, when
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people
stay in an environment full of the
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language
, it can force them to learn it
quickly
. The reason is that
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people
are scared
when they are in an unfamiliar place,
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so
they would tend to adapt in the new environment
quickly
. This would give them a motivation learning
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foreign
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language
.
Furthermore
, there are over 70%
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people
can speak English in the world. Even when you are in the countries that are
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less
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people
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use
English, such as Japan, China or Korea. You can
still
find
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people
who can speak and even express what they want to say in English.
As a result
, there is no need to worry about those
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problems
in a long term.

In conclusion
, I
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only
partly
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agree
with the statement in question. Although
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people
would face
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some
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problems
when they are using
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foreign
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language
in other countries,
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but
if they try
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hard
to learn, they can overcome those difficulties.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement? v. 28

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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