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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.25

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement? v. 25
Language barriers have been a debatable topic since time immemorial. Some people that it causes difficulties for people in another territory while others think otherwise. Immigrants usually experience issues when they trade and when they try to learn the new languages in the countries they migrated to and I fully support this fact. Admittedly, those who believe that new entrants to country do not face challenges genuinely believe this because migration is very easy these days. In order words, the ease of migration has made many families move across countries to find a new life but this movement comes at a cost. For example, having to live in a place where know one loves you. This can cause many troubles and sometimes tension leading to loss of loved ones and should therefore be avoided. Nevertheless, others say that migrants face challenges in the new areas where they live for the following reasons. First, trading is difficult. This means that such persons can be easily cheated in their business dealings because they do not understand the new language. For instance, such people tend to pay more than necessary for cheap goods because of ignorance of the ways of communicating which is different from the system in their home countries. This leads to bigger problems because they will quickly run out of cash. Secondly, the new migrants face much stress in learning the new language. This is because they need to first find someone willing to teach them, until then, they remain a laughing stock to their new neighbours. This can be very frustrating to new comers. In conclusion, although the ease to change countries is easier these days, I strongly agree that the challenges faced after such decisions are traumatizing.
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Language
barriers have been a debatable topic since time immemorial.
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Some
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people
that it causes difficulties for
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people
in another territory while others
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think
otherwise
. Immigrants
usually
experience issues when they trade and when they try to learn the
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new
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languages
in the
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countries
they migrated to and I
fully
support this fact.

Admittedly
, those who believe that
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new
entrants to
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country
do not face challenges
genuinely
believe this
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because
migration is
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very
easy these days. In order words, the
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ease
of migration has made
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many
families
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move
across
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countries
to find a
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new
life
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but
this movement
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comes
at a cost.
For example
, having to
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live
in a place where know one
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loves
you. This can cause
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many
troubles and
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sometimes
tension leading to loss of
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loved
ones and should
therefore
be avoided
.

Nevertheless
, others say that migrants face challenges in the
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new
areas where they
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live
for the following reasons.
First
, trading is difficult. This means that such persons can be
easily
cheated in their business dealings
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because
they do not understand the
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new
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language
.
For instance
, such
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people
tend to pay more than necessary for
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cheap
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goods
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because
of ignorance of the ways of communicating which is
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different
from the system in their home
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countries
. This leads to bigger problems
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because
they will
quickly
run out of cash.
Secondly
, the
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new
migrants face much
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stress
in learning the
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new
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language
. This is
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because
they need to
first
find someone
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willing
to teach them, until then, they remain a
Did you mean "laughingstock"?
laughing stock
to their
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new
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neighbours
. This can be
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very
frustrating to
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new comers
.

In conclusion
, although the
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ease
to
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change
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countries
is easier these days, I
strongly
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agree
that the challenges faced after such decisions are traumatizing.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement? v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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