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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.23

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement? v. 23
There is no doubt that living abroad has become commonplace in the light of globalization. However, a school of thought holds that living overseas could make people suffer from social and practical trouble. In this essay, I will examine the problems associated with this trend before looking at some of its benefits. On the one hand, individuals moving to another country are likely to face alienation. This can be attributed to discrimination and bullying in certain parts of the world. They are often browbeaten by a group of people as a result of their nationalities and appearances, which makes them reluctant to communicate and become more reserved. Moreover, people staying in a foreign may encounter culture shock. In the long run, this would cause them to become depressed, or even commit suicide. On the other hand, living in another country is not without benefits. Exposing to sufferings could be a valuable asset to gain experience in a new land. When people brave the problems that they run into in another country, they will have an opportunity to improve various skills such as problem solving ability, flexibility. . . to help their workflow. Moreover, living abroad also gives individuals connections from all over the world, so they would have an understanding of many cultures and a new light about other nations. In conclusion, regardless of social and practical problems that people who live overseas are likely to have, it is still a good way for them to experience and gain a wealth of interesting knowledge and skills.
There is no doubt that
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living
abroad has become commonplace in the light of globalization.
However
, a school of
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thought
holds that
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living
overseas could
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make
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people
suffer from social and practical trouble. In this essay, I will examine the
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problems
associated with this trend
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before
looking at
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some
of its benefits.

On the one hand, individuals moving to another country are likely to face alienation. This can
be attributed
to discrimination and bullying in certain parts of the world. They are
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often
browbeaten by a group of
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people
as a result
of their nationalities and appearances, which
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makes
them reluctant to communicate and become more reserved.
Moreover
,
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people
staying in a foreign may encounter culture shock. In the long run, this would cause them to become depressed, or even commit suicide.

On the other hand
,
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living
in another country is not without benefits. Exposing to sufferings could be a valuable asset to gain experience in a new land. When
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people
brave the
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problems
that they run into in another country, they will have an opportunity to
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improve
various
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skills
such as
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problem
solving ability, flexibility.
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.
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.
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to
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help
their workflow.
Moreover
,
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living
abroad
also
gives individuals connections from all over the world,
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so
they would have an understanding of
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many
cultures and a new light about other nations.

In conclusion
, regardless of social and practical
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problems
that
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people
who
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live
overseas are likely to have, it is
still
a
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good
way for them to experience and gain a wealth of interesting knowledge and
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skills
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement? v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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