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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement? v. 2
Residing in a country where one has to communicate in a foreign language comes with some challenges. Because of the need to speak such language often, there can be some practical, as well as social problems. I strongly agree with this assertion and this essay will elucidate on this. To begin, due to the necessity of conversation in a non native language, there may be some serious problems with socialization. Firstly, building and sustaining relationships, such as, business, friendship and marriage can be very challenging. Language barrier thus causes ineffective communication leading to frequent disagreement. A lot of courtship between the dutch and immigrants, for example, did not lead to marriage, as observed by a magazine recently. Secondly, it is difficult to relax well. One may be discouraged to attend social functions. A good example is the few non nationals present at a comedy show in Togo because the anchor spoke in French. It is very obvious that problems with interaction can come up because of language barrier. Furthermore, practical problems can be experienced; it may be difficult to secure some appointment, as jobs, such as, public relation officer (PRO), where one has to speak mainly local language, will not be available to foreigners. A good example is the stiff competition for few employment slots by immigrants to China. In addition, education can pose some challenges. As teaching is done in the foreign language, most students will find it difficult to comprehend. For example, first year undergraduates of a German school had to study German for a year. Working and studying difficulties can thus accompany living in a country different from ones own. In conclusion, although living in a foreign country comes with some benefits, there can also be some serious problems socially and practically. I strongly opine that this is usually the case. Government, therefore should take steps to minimise them.
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language
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some
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language
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often
, there can be
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some
practical,
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as social
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problems
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strongly
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agree
with this assertion and this essay will elucidate on this.

To
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, due to the necessity of conversation in a
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non native
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language
, there may be
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some
serious
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problems
with socialization.
Firstly
, building and sustaining relationships, such as, business, friendship and marriage can be
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very
challenging.
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barrier
thus
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courtship between the dutch and immigrants, for
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, did not lead to marriage, as observed by a magazine recently.
Secondly
, it is difficult to relax well. One may
be discouraged
to attend social functions. A
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good
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example
is the few non nationals present at a comedy
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show
in Togo
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because
the anchor spoke in French. It is
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obvious that
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problems
with interaction can
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come
up
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of
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Furthermore
, practical
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problems
can
be experienced
; it may be difficult to secure
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some
appointment, as jobs, such as, public relation officer (PRO), where one
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has to
speak
mainly
local
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language
, will not be available to foreigners. A
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good
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example
is the stiff competition for few employment slots by immigrants to China.
In addition
, education can pose
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some
challenges. As teaching
is done
in the foreign
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language
, most students will find it difficult to comprehend. For
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example
,
first
year undergraduates of a German school had to study German for a year. Working and studying difficulties can
thus
accompany living in a country
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different
from ones
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own
.

In conclusion
, although living in a foreign country
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comes
with
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some
benefits, there can
also
be
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some
serious
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problems
socially
and
practically
. I
strongly
opine that this is
usually
the case.
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Government
,
therefore
should take steps to
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minimise
them.
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IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. with this statement? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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