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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend you you agree or disagree with this statement. v.19

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. v. 19
Nowadays, there has been a trend in which people tend to go abroad to study and work. As a result, they must speak a foreign language. Some people argue that speaking a language other than a person's mother tongue may lead to some worth-considering social problems as well as practical problems. I agree with this statement. One of the most significant difficulties of immigrants living overseas is language barriers. If a person is incapable of speaking the widely-used language in a country, he is likely to face troubles immersing himself in the new environment. He may find himself helpless and unable to deal with simple daily activities such as talking with neighbors, going shopping, contacting banks, and local governments. Besides, the lack of foreign language ability may result in misunderstanding or even cultural conflicts which may marginalize him from the local society. Even worse, some people even violate local regulations because of their illiteracy; they cannot read and understand the regulations to follow the rules. Also, poor verbal and written communication in foreign languages may be the leading cause of the high rate of unemployment among immigrants. A vast majority of immigrants cannot apply for high-paid decent jobs since most of these jobs require language competence. Also, illiteracy and language misunderstanding may lead to mental health problems such as stress and depression. Therefore, language plays a crucial part in enabling a person to integrate into a new environment. In conclusion, to adapt to the new environment well, immigrants should be able to communicate well in the language spoken in their localities. Lack of foreign language ability may cause multiple troubles to any person living in a foreign country. Therefore, before deciding to relocate to a foreign country, people should learn the language beforehand.
Nowadays, there has been a trend in which
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people
tend to go abroad to study and work.
As a result
, they
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must
speak a
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foreign
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language
.
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Some
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people
argue that speaking a
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language
other than a person's mother tongue may lead to
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some
worth-considering social problems
as well
as practical problems. I
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agree
with this statement.

One of the most significant difficulties of
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immigrants
living overseas is
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language
barriers. If a person is incapable of speaking the
widely
-
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used
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language
in a country, he is likely to face troubles immersing himself in the new environment. He may find himself helpless and unable to deal with simple daily activities such as talking with neighbors, going shopping, contacting banks, and local
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governments
.
Besides
, the lack of
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foreign
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language
ability may result in misunderstanding or even cultural conflicts which may marginalize him from the local society. Even worse,
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some
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people
even violate local regulations
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because
of their illiteracy; they cannot read and understand the regulations to follow the
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rules
.

Also
, poor verbal and written communication in
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foreign
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languages
may be the leading cause of the high rate of unemployment among
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immigrants
. A vast majority of
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immigrants
cannot apply for high-paid decent jobs since most of these jobs require
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language
competence.
Also
, illiteracy and
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language
misunderstanding may lead to mental health problems such as
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stress
and depression.
Therefore
,
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language
plays a crucial part in enabling a person to integrate into a new environment.

In conclusion
, to adapt to the new environment well,
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immigrants
should be able to communicate well in the
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language
spoken in their localities. Lack of
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foreign
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language
ability may cause multiple troubles to any person living in a
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foreign
country.
Therefore
,
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before
deciding to relocate to a
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foreign
country,
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people
should learn the
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language
beforehand.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
A new language is a new life.
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IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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