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living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement v.15

living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems with this statement v. 15
It is said that there are many serious issues for persons who live in a country where they have to communicate in foreign language. In my opinion, I totally agree with this point that they get trouble not only in communication, but also in fairness of payroll. On the one hand, communication is the first problem that foreign speakers are easy to get stuck. They find that it is difficult to have natural conversations with native speakers and misunderstanding or making silly actions are the popular situations that they can commit. For example, non-native speakers realise that it is hard for them to keep track their director’s speaking in English and takes them double time to finish the assignments. Furthermore, non-native speakers feel lonely in conversations with their colleagues who just use idoms and local vocabulary to chat, which hardly recognise whether it is just a joke. On the other hand, there is unfair salary between foreign speakers and native speakers and unfairness among foreigners, either. For instance, Vietnamese working for a British company located in Phillipines are paid lower than Korean who work the same company and so the same tasks. Because they are paid based on the living cost of the country they have nationality. Moreover, English native speakers without English teaching certificate and living in a country where teaching English is necessary always receive higher salary than non-native speakers who also teach English with qualified diploma. In conclusion, besides the mother language, it is very popular that most of countries exist at least two languages and they sometimes use foreign language on daily conversations or for their job. Hence, the problems in communication or payroll unfairness are inevitable.
It
is said
that there are
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many
serious issues for persons
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who
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live
in a
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country
where they
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have to
communicate in
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foreign
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language
. In my opinion, I
totally
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agree
with this point that they
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get
trouble not
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only
in communication,
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but
also
in fairness of payroll.

On the one hand, communication is the
first
problem that
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foreign
speakers are easy to
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get
stuck. They find that it is difficult to have natural conversations with native speakers and misunderstanding or making silly actions are the popular situations that they can commit.
For example
, non-native speakers
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realise
that it is
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hard
for them to
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keep
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track
their director’s speaking in English and takes them double time to finish the assignments.
Furthermore
, non-native speakers feel lonely in conversations with their colleagues
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who
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just
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use
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idoms
and local vocabulary to chat, which hardly
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recognise
whether it is
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just
a joke.

On the other hand
, there is unfair salary between
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foreign
speakers and native speakers and unfairness among foreigners, either.
For instance
, Vietnamese working for a British
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company
located in
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Phillipines
are paid
lower than Korean
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who
work the same
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company
and
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so
the same tasks.
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Because
they
are paid
based on the living cost of the
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country
they have nationality.
Moreover
, English native speakers without English teaching certificate and living in a
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country
where teaching English is necessary always receive higher salary than non-native speakers
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who
also
teach English with qualified diploma.

In conclusion
,
besides
the mother
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language
, it is
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very
popular that most of
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countries
exist at least two
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
languages and
they
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sometimes
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use
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foreign
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language
on daily conversations or for their job.
Hence
, the problems in communication or payroll unfairness are inevitable.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
A foreign language is like a frail, delicate muscle. If you do not use it, it weakens.
Jhumpa Lahiri

IELTS essay living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems with this statement v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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