In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions in this? v.14
In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions in this? v. 14
Working is necessary for living as well as to gain some experience. It is often argued by people that, children who are involved in paid works are not good for them, while others think that, it is very useful that children can get an important job experience, they can be independent, and they can learn something that is useful for their career. I totally agree with the statement that children need to work.
Firstly, all people needs money to survive, whereas students need the most if they are staying alone, then it helps them for their living and as well as for their tuition fees. For example, my friend is staying in the main town, whereas he always had difficulties paying his fees, but after he got a new paid job, he seems to relax more than he used to. So, working in terms of money is really essential for the children's who are living independently.
Secondly, working in a place helps you to find out, what are your strength and weakness. Moreover, it also provide guidance on what steps should one take for their better future. As you job somewhere, it added a plus point of your C. V, you will get valuable experience which adds and extra skill on your talent. Not only that, children who works, they bound to meet new faces and can get new ideas also. For example, my brother who used to work in marketing, now works for one of the leading company in our country CG groups because of the experiences and knowledge he got from the marketing.
In conclusion, allowing children to work is very useful for their upcoming future and also helps them to live independently.
Working is necessary for living
as well
as to gain
some
experience
. It is
often
argued by
people
that,
children
who
are involved
in paid works are not
good
for them, while others
think
that, it is
very
useful that
children
can
get
an
important
job
experience
, they can be independent, and they can learn something
that is
useful for their career. I
totally
agree
with the statement that
children
need to work.
Firstly
, all
people
needs
money to survive, whereas students need the most if they are staying alone, then it
helps
them for their living and
as well
as for their tuition fees.
For example
, my friend is staying in the main town, whereas he always had difficulties paying his fees,
but
after he
got
a new paid job, he seems to relax more than he
used
to.
So
, working in terms of money is
really
essential for the children's
who
are living
independently
.
Secondly
, working in a place
helps you to find
out, what are your strength and weakness.
Moreover
, it
also
provide
guidance on what steps should one take for their better future. As you job somewhere, it
added
a plus point of your C. V, you will
get
valuable
experience
which
adds
and extra
skill
on your talent. Not
only
that,
children
who
works
, they bound to
meet
new faces and can
get
new
ideas
also
.
For example
, my brother
who
used
to
work
in marketing,
now
works for one of the leading
company
in our country CG groups
because
of the
experiences
and knowledge he
got
from the marketing.
In conclusion
, allowing
children
to
work
is
very
useful for their upcoming future and
also
helps
them to
live
independently
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes