Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer language in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer language in the world. v. 7
It is true that people are more curious to know some language, which are very useful throughout the world. Although, this modern tendency is affecting to die out several language in many parts of the world. In this connection, I do not agree with this assertion. However, I believe that every language has unique characteristic, which represent a nation and their creativity with another one. To begin with, there are some detrimental effects in using a number of languages. Firstly, each language is unique to culture and tradition that can easily introduce them with others. If the language die out in the world. Therefore, their norms and values are gradually dispel in the world. Furthermore, there are many, who feel comfortable to give their opinions in their own language that are not vividly easier to speech another one. Apart from this, to have some language create bitter relationship among the citizen because all are not capable to keep or describe their views by depending another language. Although, to emphasize another norms create rival ties with another state. Pakistan government, for example, emphasized to use in Urdu language for the people of Bangladesh, but they prefer to use their own language in Bangla, Which conflict made the international mother language day that is the symbol of language power. On the other hand, having a fewer language in the world has some positive development for the individual people. The first and most factor is that it creates a multilateral relationship among people. Even if, it open the door to study abroad without any difficulty. There are no hindrance to access in taking any lucrative achievement in the globe. Needless to say that language not only give higher success but also introduce many innovative things in the world. It goes without saying that people can easily understand, while talking or watching with another countries telecasts and their programs or events. English, for instance, is known as international language, what is widely used to conversation people with another. By using this language mankind can express their thinking and creativity with another people or country. In conclusion, commonly spoken language may make life more straightforward. Even though it has some merits for global business. I believe that people can express their beauty, norms, values in own language, which cannot be worthwhile by using another one.
It is true that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are more curious to know
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
, which are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
useful throughout the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, this modern tendency is affecting to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
die
out several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
parts of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
. In this connection, I do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this assertion.
However
, I believe that every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
has unique characteristic, which represent a nation and their creativity with another one.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
detrimental effects in using a number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
languages
.
Firstly
, each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
is unique to culture and tradition that can
easily
introduce them with others.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
die
out in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
.
Therefore
, their norms and values are
gradually
Consider using a past participle here: "dispelled".
dispel
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
.
Furthermore
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
, who feel comfortable to give their opinions in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
that are not
vividly
easier to speech another one. Apart from this, to have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Did you mean "languages"?
language
create bitter relationship among the citizen
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
all are not capable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
describe
their views by
The verb 'to depend' requires the preposition '(up)on': "depending on".
depending
another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, to emphasize another norms create rival ties with another state. Pakistan
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
,
for example
, emphasized to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
in Urdu
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
of Bangladesh,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
in
Possible spelling mistake found.
Bangla
, Which conflict made the international mother
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
day
that is
the symbol of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
power.

On the other hand
, having a fewer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
development for the individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. The
first
and most factor is that it creates a multilateral relationship among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. Even if, it open the door to study abroad without any difficulty. There are no
Possible agreement error. Did you mean "hindrances"?
hindrance
to access in taking any lucrative achievement in the globe. Needless to say that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
give higher success
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
introduce
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
innovative things in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
. It goes without saying that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can
easily
understand, while talking or watching with another countries telecasts and their programs or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
. English,
for instance
,
is known
as international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
, what is
widely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to conversation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
with another. By using this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
mankind can express their thinking and creativity with another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
or country.

In conclusion
,
commonly
spoken
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
life more straightforward.
Even though
it has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
merits for global business. I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can express their beauty, norms, values in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
, which cannot be worthwhile by using another one.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer language in the world. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
390 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts