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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. v.31

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. v. 31
Language bridges individual across the globe. Annually, several languages are eliminated in this modern society. Some sociology experts believe that people can live easily if they can communicate clearly with other nationalities. They suggest that few languages must be studied, however, I do not agree with this belief because other languages contribute to the ancient culture and civilisation. We can never deny others, who believe that studying several languages are stressful and difficult. For example, understanding Nihonggo requires intensive study of words and idioms. In addition, their structure in writing is different from other countries. As a result, it becomes a burden on other people to study the language they are not used to. Moreover, they become exhausted and confused if they are not familiar with the country’s culture. According to others, studying single language removes communication barriers across the world. As an example, using English as a capital language unites a majority of people around the world. People using this language can easily understand each other because it is normally taught in school. If people uses single language then the communication will not b a problem. However, in other parts of the country, language is considered part of their culture.   As an example, civilisation in Egypt is born because of language and communication. More so Spain has one language because it resembles their identity and pride. Language cannot be easily taken from other countries because of its historical significance. People should not be encapsulated in a limited language. To conclude, other people consider studying fewer languages as the uncomplicated task; however certain languages resemble historical value and should be given importance.
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Language
bridges individual across the globe.
Annually
, several
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languages
are eliminated
in this modern society.
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sociology experts believe that
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people
can
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live
easily
if they can communicate
clearly
with
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other
nationalities. They suggest that few
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languages
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must
be studied
,
however
, I do not
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agree
with this belief
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because
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other
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languages
contribute to the ancient culture and
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civilisation
.

We can never deny others, who believe that studying several
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languages
are stressful and difficult.
For example
, understanding
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Nihonggo
requires intensive study of words and idioms.
In addition
, their structure in writing is
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different
from
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other
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countries
.
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, it becomes a burden on
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other
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people
to study the
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language
they are not
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used
to.
Moreover
, they become exhausted and confused if they are not familiar with the
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country’s
culture. According to others, studying single
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language
removes communication barriers across the world. As an example, using English as a capital
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language
unites a majority of
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people
around the world.
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using this
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language
can
easily
understand each
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other
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because
it is
normally
taught in school. If
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people
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uses
single
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language
then the communication will not b a problem.

However
, in
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other
parts of the
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country
,
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language
is considered
part of their culture.
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As an example,
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civilisation
in Egypt
is born
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because
of
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language
and communication. More
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so
Spain has one
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language
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because
it resembles their identity and pride.
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cannot be
easily
taken from
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other
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countries
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because
of its historical significance.
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People
should not
be encapsulated
in a limited language.

To conclude
,
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other
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people
consider studying fewer
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languages
as the uncomplicated task;
however
certain
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languages
resemble historical value and should be
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given
importance.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. v. 31

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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