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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.3

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion. v. 3
Language is the means of communication. There is no denying the fact the life would be a whole lot easier if we all spoke the same language. However, this does not mean that we should let languages die. In the past, language barriers used to prevent people living in one part of the world from communicating with people living in another part. Now thanks to the availability of better modes of transport people are traveling to other countries and continents. This has also led to the massive adoption of languages spoken in the developed world. English is a good example. People coming from developing countries are trying hard to learn English because it opens many doors. This is definitely a positive development. On the flip side, the world wide adoption of a couple of languages that have a large number of speakers has led to the death of several less popular languages. These are mainly the languages spoken in the developing world. Some of them don’t have a large number of speakers. Others do have enough speakers, but learning or speaking them do not improve a person’s career prospects and hence they do not enjoy acceptance even in their countries. For example, most parents in India now send their children to English medium schools because English enhances their employability. Unfortunately, this is leading to the death of several local languages. When a language dies, the culture associated with it is also dying. This may have far reaching consequences. When communities adopt foreign languages and allow their mother tongues to die, they are actually allowing their culture and legacy to die. In the process, they will also lose their identity. To conclude, the death of local languages is an alarming development. There is no harm in adopting a popular language like English. It will make communication easier and improve our lives. However, we should still keep our mother tongues alive by using them within our country and community.
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Language
is the means of communication. There is no denying the fact the life would be a
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whole lot
easier if we all spoke the same
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language
.
However
, this does not mean that we should
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let
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languages
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die
.

In the past,
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language
barriers
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used
to
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prevent
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people
living in one part of the
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world
from communicating with
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people
living in another part.
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Now
thanks to the availability of better modes of transport
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people
are traveling to other countries and continents. This has
also
led to the massive adoption of
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languages
spoken in the developed
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world
. English is a
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good
example.
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People
coming from
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developing countries
are trying
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hard
to learn English
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because
it opens
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many
doors. This is definitely a
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positive
development.

On the flip side, the
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world wide
adoption of a couple of
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languages
that have
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a large number of
speakers has led to the death of several less popular
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languages
. These are
mainly
the
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languages
spoken in the developing
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world
.
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Some
of them don’t have
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a large number of
speakers. Others do have
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enough
speakers,
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but
learning or speaking them do not
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improve
a person’s career prospects and
hence
they do not enjoy acceptance even in their countries.

For example
, most parents in India
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now
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send
their children to English medium schools
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because
English enhances their employability. Unfortunately, this is leading to the death of several local
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languages
. When a
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language
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dies
, the culture associated with it is
also
dying. This may have
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far reaching
consequences. When communities adopt foreign
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languages
and
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allow
their mother tongues to
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die
, they are actually allowing their culture and legacy to
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die
. In the process, they will
also
lose their identity.

To conclude
, the death of local
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languages
is an alarming development. There is no harm in adopting a popular
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language
like English. It will
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make
communication easier and
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improve
our
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lives
.
However
, we should
still
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keep
our mother tongues alive by using them within our country and community.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
To learn a language is to have one more window from which to look at the world.
Chinese Proverb

IELTS essay Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
327 words
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