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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.27

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion. v. 27
Today, some of the major challenges workers face in Big cities is traffic congestion and accommodation issues. Some are of the suggestion that companies should migrate to rural settings along with their employees to mitigate such. However, I believe that there are other solutions to this. Proponents in support of this say that the major reason why companies should move to the countryside is because there will be proximity to obligation place. Workers on a daily basis commute to their place of work and most times, they are being held up in traffic. For example, most individuals who live in rural areas work in large cities to make a living and end up coming late as a result of traffic or no where to stay in the city which leads to losing their job or dismissal from duty. Therefore, if these factories or companies should move to the countryside and establish there, late coming will be reduced and labourers will find it easy to come to place of duty unlike thinking of how to beat the jam daily. In contrast, I would argue that moving these organisations to the villages is not the solution to difficulty of housing and hold ups. First and foremost, these companies should provide accommodation for the employees as well as feeding. This will act as a motivational factor to perform relentlessly. As a result, there won't be lackadaisical attitude to job resulting from coming from a far distant per day. In addition, working hours should be reduced. For example, those that work from 9am till 5pm on a daily basis will not have enough time to be with their family members because of getting home at late hours. So if working hours are flexible for them, they will be able to be with their family again. In conclusion, although companies movement to rural side is a solution to these problems, I believe that providing housing and reduction of hours spent in working is an alternative to that. If these are implemented, there would not be a paramount issue like this in the future
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Today
,
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some of the
major challenges workers face in
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Big
cities is traffic congestion and accommodation issues.
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Some
are of the suggestion that
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companies
should migrate to rural settings along with their employees to mitigate such.
However
, I believe that there are other solutions to this.

Proponents in support of this say that the major reason why
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companies
should
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move
to the countryside is
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because
there will be proximity to obligation place. Workers on a daily basis commute to their place of work and most times, they are
being held
up in traffic.
For example
, most individuals who
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live
in rural areas work in large cities to
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make
a living and
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end
up coming late
as a result
of traffic or
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no
where to stay in the city which leads to losing their job or dismissal from duty.
Therefore
, if these factories or
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companies
should
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move
to the countryside and establish there, late coming will be
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reduced
and
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labourers
will find it easy to
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come
to place of duty unlike thinking of how to beat the jam daily.

In contrast
, I would argue that moving these
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organisations
to the villages is not the solution to difficulty of housing and
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hold ups
.
First
and foremost, these
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companies
should provide accommodation for the employees
as well
as feeding. This will act as a motivational factor to perform
relentlessly
.
As a result
, there won't be lackadaisical attitude to job resulting from coming from a far distant per day.
In addition
, working
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hours
should be
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reduced
.
For example
, those that work from 9am till 5pm on a daily basis will not have
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enough
time to be with their family members
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because
of getting home at late
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hours
.
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So
if working
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hours
are flexible for them, they will be able to be with their family again.

In conclusion
, although
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companies
movement to rural side is a solution to these problems, I believe that providing housing and reduction of
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hours
spent in working is an alternative to that. If these
are implemented
, there would not be a paramount issue like this in the
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future
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion. v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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