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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.21

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. v. 21
Languages play an indispensable role in helping people interacting and understanding each other. However, it is argued that a wide range of languages, which have already gone extinct, would not be a matter of debate. From my perspective, I totally agree with this idea. To commence with, although a variety of rare languages are on the verge of extinction, this change appears to be a positive impact on paving the way for humans being to adapt globalization. To put it simply, plenty of international issues will be discussed more easily by several countries. For instance, a conference among nations debating about how to deal with environmental problems cannot reach the same conclusion, if there is a conflict between cultures and languages, causing confusion on each other. Apart from the concern expressed above, I also believe that languages that people no longer use are not ubiquitous enough for most of the population to perceive in modern days. To be more specific, knowledge via textbooks, documents or some source of media such as newspapers, Internet and TV will be translated into languages mainly welcomed by the world. For example, because English and Chinese are international languages, speakers all over the globe are encouraged to absorb information written in them, so that they can interact with other foreigners and comprehend the basic conversations when communicating. In short, although the world might not maintain the diversity of languages, I align myself with the viewpoint that the disappearance of some languages is not a serious threat to the community.
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play an indispensable role in helping
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people
interacting and understanding each other.
However
, it
is argued
that a wide range of
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languages
, which have already gone extinct, would not be a matter of debate. From my perspective, I
totally
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agree
with this
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idea
.

To commence with, although a variety of rare
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languages
are on the verge of extinction, this
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change
appears to be a
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positive
impact on paving the way for humans being to adapt globalization. To put it
simply
,
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plenty
of international issues will
be discussed
more
easily
by several countries.
For instance
, a conference among nations debating about how to deal with environmental problems cannot reach the same conclusion, if there is a conflict between cultures and
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languages
, causing confusion on each other.

Apart from the concern expressed above, I
also
believe that
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languages
that
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people
no longer
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use
are not ubiquitous
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enough
for most of the population to perceive in modern days. To be more specific, knowledge via textbooks, documents or
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some
source of media such as newspapers, Internet and TV will
be translated
into
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languages
mainly
welcomed by the world.
For example
,
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because
English and Chinese are international
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languages
, speakers all over the globe
are encouraged
to absorb information written in them,
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so
that they can interact with other foreigners and comprehend the basic conversations when communicating.

In short, although the world might not maintain the diversity of
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languages
, I align myself with the viewpoint that the disappearance of
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some
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languages
is not a serious threat to the community.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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