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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.19

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion? v. 19
There are some languages extincted every year due to various reasons, but those are minority languages. A group of people believes that extinction of minority languages is not a serious problem since it is easier for them to communicate with other nations if exist only the common languages in the world. Although, there are some benefits of having fewer languages, I believe disappearing of languages are really impacted to the different cultures and communities in the world. Nowadays, most of the people are trying to be westernized because business interactions and other communications are happened by using the international languages such as English, French, German and so forth. Furthermore, the majority of the people use these international languages to converse with others. In addition, most of the subjects in higher studies use the medium as English in several countries. In consequently, those people do not see the value of minority languages. However, having the several languages represent the diversity and identity of the community. For instance, many legends and historical documents were written by using languages that are not common to all. If languages are extincted, no one will be able to read those valuable historical documents. Therefore, it is clear that languages represent the uniqueness of the society and community and disappearing of languages is impacted to our traditions and norms. To conclude, the diversity of the languages represents the civilization and die out of the languages are damaged the uniqueness of the community. Therefore, it's our responsibility to protect those minority languages.
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believes that extinction of
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is not a serious problem since it is easier for them to communicate with other nations if exist
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in the world. Although, there are
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benefits of having fewer
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, I believe disappearing of
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are
really
impacted to the
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communities
in the world.

Nowadays, most of the
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people
are trying to be
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because
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by using the international
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such as English, French, German and
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forth.
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to converse with others.
In addition
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the medium as English in several countries. In
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the value of
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However
, having the several
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languages
represent the diversity and identity of the
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community
.
For instance
,
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many
legends and historical documents
were written
by using
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languages
that are not common to all. If
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are extincted
, no one will be able to read those valuable historical documents.
Therefore
, it is
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that
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languages
represent the uniqueness of the society and
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community
and disappearing of
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languages
is impacted
to our traditions and norms.

To conclude
, the diversity of the
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languages
represents the civilization and
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die
out of the
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languages
are damaged
the uniqueness of the
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community
.
Therefore
, it's our responsibility to protect those
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minority
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languages
.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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