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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.18

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion? v. 18
Although several languages are becoming extinct every year, the situation seems irrelevant to some people. For some, it will be less difficult if there are fewer language in the world. But, since we have lots of different cultures and thoughts, and these differences are described in different languages, it is important preserving all these languages. Firstly, our world is comprised of a variety of human races which live in different parts around the globe. Each races live in their own particular places and develop their distinctive civilizations. Then, those cultures derive into words, phrases and becoming languages. For example, the greeting posture both in Thailand and India are the similar, but it is called “Wai” in Thailand and “Namaste” in India. This gives us the picture of how people in different societies have their own impact on languages. Also, how the language represent the way of life, too. Secondly, thoughts such as “Feng Shui” in China or “Bushido” in Japan, are the products from the civilization that has nurtured the society for over centuries. For instance, “Feng Shui” is a phrase meaning “Good spirit” in Chinese, and it also impacts their homes and their way of living. One particular example is Hong Kong, despite being a former British colony, its preserved Chinese values which come from the language has made Hong Kong’s buildings very distinctive and made the city famous of its skyline. So, thoughts and beliefs are represented within the languages. Finally, since all those cultures, thought and beliefs which impact on lives in different areas around the world are all connected with the languages. Thus, it is crucial preserving those languages to keep our world vibrant.
Although several
languages
are becoming extinct every year, the situation seems irrelevant to
some
people
. For
some
, it will be less difficult if there are fewer
language
in the
world
.
But
, since we have lots of
different
cultures and
thoughts
, and these differences are
described
in
different
languages
, it is
important
preserving all these languages.

Firstly
, our
world
is comprised of
a variety of human races which
live
in
different
parts around the globe.
Each
races
live
in their
own
particular places and develop their distinctive civilizations. Then, those cultures derive into words, phrases and becoming
languages
.
For example
, the greeting posture both in Thailand and India are the similar,
but
it
is called
Wai
” in Thailand and “Namaste” in India. This gives us the picture of how
people
in
different
societies have their
own
impact on
languages
.
Also
, how the
language
represent the way of life, too.

Secondly
,
thoughts
such as “
Feng
Shui
” in China or “Bushido” in Japan, are the products from the civilization that has nurtured the society for over centuries.
For instance
, “
Feng
Shui
” is a phrase meaning “
Good
spirit” in Chinese, and it
also
impacts their homes and their way of living. One particular example is Hong Kong, despite being a former British colony, its preserved Chinese values which
come
from the
language
has made Hong Kong’s buildings
very
distinctive and made the city
famous
of its skyline.
So
,
thoughts
and beliefs
are represented
within the languages.

Finally
, since all those cultures,
thought
and beliefs which impact on
lives
in
different
areas around the
world
are all connected with the
languages
.
Thus
, it is crucial preserving those
languages
to
keep
our
world
vibrant.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Every year several languages die out. Some people think that is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion? v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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