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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. v.16

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. v. 16
These days, if we look accurately into some details about different languages, we would face this fact that many languages, which are means of communication, particularly through local people, are going to fade. Although some people believed that it is not a big deal, it should be considered as a big problem. In this essay, I am going to reveal some of the perspectives on this controversial issue. On the one hand, every single nation has its culture, and they usually have a specific language of it, thus they could use it as a means of communication, and somehow they could pass the torch to their pure culture to the from their anecdotes to their following generations. Moreover, the specific language of every nation is something that could make the bond between them stronger and would keep them united. On the other hand, some others believed that it does not care if various languages die one after another. They might think that the more the years pass, the more we go through globalization, and the more we need to care less about different tongues. They are believed that just one language is enough to communicate, and if all people learn to talk in that specific language, it would be enough. For example, these days learning the English language is widespread all over the world, and this motion has brought this attention to some people, that for the whole world, dominance in one language is pretty enough. Overall, I do not support this idea, that believes in destroying other languages in case of reaching for an easier life. Every single language which is going to die needs to be survived, and it demands support and collaboration of people, who their parents and grandparents talk those tongues.
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, are going to fade. Although
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usually
have a specific
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language
of it,
thus
they could
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use
it as a means of communication, and somehow they could pass the torch to their pure culture to the
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their anecdotes to their following generations.
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, the specific
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of every nation is something that could
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people
learn to talk in that specific
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language
, it would be
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.
For example
, these days learning the English
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language
is widespread all over the world, and this motion has brought this attention to
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people
, that for the whole world, dominance in one
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language
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enough
.

Overall
, I do not support this
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, that believes in destroying other
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languages
in case of reaching for an easier life. Every single
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language
which is going to
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die
needs to
be survived
, and it demands support and collaboration of
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people
, who their parents and grandparents talk those tongues.
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IELTS essay Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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