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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.11

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion. v. 11
Language is a speech or phrases that people use to commute with others. It also has more than 8000 languages which people around the world speak as their first and second languages. However, some group thinks that although some language disappears, it does not have any effects on the daily life. They will feel more easier communication with those few languages. Therefore, I disagree with this idea and I will explain in this essay below. Firstly, languages help to build a unity in nation because people proud with their own language which lead them to become the team even if they come from the different places. Moreover, languages also help to speard a cultural and enhances more diversity in the country. For example, people around the world can easily access and learn new languages from their home. This creates the connection between people and spreads their cultures through the communication. Secondly, languages can conserve the old traditional and cultural because one language presents their uniqueness and the history. For instance, Thailand has four different languages in each regional. Each of them shows a different tradition in each region such as Thai south language is not usually spoke. It reflects the south's cultural as Thai south dancing, which called "nang ta look". In conclusion, languages are valuable to our nation because they have positively beneficial such as building unity, creating diversity in the nation and conserve the old cultural through the communication. Thus, we should always proud with our language and we should respect others.
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is a speech or phrases that
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people
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to commute with others. It
also
has more than 8000
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languages
which
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people
around the world speak as their
first
and second
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languages
.
However
,
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some
group
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thinks
that although
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some
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language
disappears, it does not have any effects on the daily life. They will feel
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more easier
communication with those few
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languages
.
Therefore
, I disagree with this
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idea
and I will
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explain
in this essay below.

Firstly
,
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languages
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help
to build a unity in nation
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because
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people
proud with their
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own
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language
which lead them to become the team even if they
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come
from the
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different
places.
Moreover
,
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languages
also
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help
to
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speard
a
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cultural
and enhances more diversity in the country.
For example
,
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people
around the world can
easily
access and learn new
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languages
from their home. This creates the
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connection between
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people
and spreads their cultures through the communication.

Secondly
,
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languages
can conserve the
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old
traditional and
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cultural
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because
one
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language
presents their uniqueness and the history.
For instance
, Thailand has four
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different
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languages
in each regional. Each of them
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shows
a
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different
tradition in each region such as Thai south
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language
is not
usually
spoke. It reflects the south's
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cultural
as Thai south dancing, which called
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"
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nang
ta look
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.

In conclusion
,
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languages
are valuable to our nation
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because
they have
positively
beneficial such as building unity, creating diversity in the nation and conserve the
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old
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cultural
through the communication.
Thus
, we
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should always proud
with our
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language and
we should respect others.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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