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Every year several language die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this opinion. v.2

Every year several language die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. whit this opinion. v. 2
In recent time it is not uncommon to see that some minority language pass away whereas others become more broadly spoken. This essay agrees that this is positive trend which leads to better understand people each other. Firstly, this essay will discuss how easier will be traveling and secondly, the essay will look at wider opportunity to study overseas due to reduce language barrier. Nowadays people travel around the world for doing business as well as for holiday. As languages such as English, Spanish or Chinese become more widely used there will be easer for humans organise their trip. If in the world were only few languages people would understand themselves without any problem and traveling become more comfortable for most people. For example, problem with misunderstanding on airport would not exist at all. Moreover, businessmen will be able to extend their business and their work will be easier due to the fact that they avoid communications problem with overseas clients and subcontractors. In addition, young people who want to study at the best university namely Harvard, Oxford would have focus their attention on sciences because problem with study subject in foreign language would not exist for them. In this way overseas students can better understanding tutor and improve their knowledge wider and dipper. In conclusion, declining amount of language in the world should be seen as a positive aspect due to the fact that average people can avoid to be misunderstand and their live become easier. This trend brings numerous advantages for business and science as well.
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some
minority
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language
pass away whereas others
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become
more
broadly
spoken. This essay
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agrees
that this is
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positive
trend which leads to better understand
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people
each other.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss how easier will be traveling and
secondly
, the essay will look at wider opportunity to study overseas due to
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reduce
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language
barrier.

Nowadays
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people
travel around the world for doing business
as well
as for holiday. As
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languages
such as English, Spanish or Chinese
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become
more
widely
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used
there will be
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easer
for humans
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organise
their trip. If in the world were
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only
few
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languages
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people
would understand themselves without any
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problem
and traveling
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become
more comfortable for most
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people
.
For example
,
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problem
with misunderstanding on airport would not exist at all.
Moreover
, businessmen will be able to extend their business and their work will be easier due to the fact that they avoid communications
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problem
with overseas clients and subcontractors.

In addition
, young
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people
who want to study at the best university
namely
Harvard, Oxford would have focus their attention on sciences
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because
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problem
with study subject in foreign
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language
would not exist for them. In this way overseas students can better understanding tutor and
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improve
their knowledge wider and dipper.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
conclusion, declining amount of
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language
in the world should be
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seen
as a
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positive
aspect due to the fact that average
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people
can
The verb 'avoid' is used with the gerund form: "avoid being".
avoid to be
Consider using a past participle here: "misunderstood".
misunderstand
and their
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live
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become
easier. This trend brings numerous advantages for business and science
as well
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
The most intimate temper of a people, its deepest soul, is above all in its language.
Jules Michelet

IELTS essay Every year several language die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. whit this opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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