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Every year serval languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Every year serval languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion? v. 1
In this the contemporary world, people are travelling to many places of the universe. They were using a common language as a result that place local language will die. However, some people perceive whether this will reduce an innumerable of languages in the universe would become a beneficial for people having an easier life. I strongly support this view with arguments in below paragraphs. To begin with, the predominant reason is for having less languages in the world would create the uniformity over the cosmos. The people who visit to various places cannot have to survive as the local community was able to understand unique language. Moreover, due to this person are always ready to migrate to another country. As this will provide them more opportunities and can excel more in their career. Although, people can manage in the new atmosphere, expands their social connection having the ability to communicate. For example, Research conducted shows that by using the same language over the nation people feel more comfortable and give more focus on their goals. Furthermore, the students can also get benefits from this. Most of the education institute was given more focus on the study of the second language. As having a single language over the world, there is no need to study the new language. Therefore, the student can give more focus on the technical subjects. Even they can also expand their studies by doing foreign visits having no barrier of language. For instance, the pupil can get an advantage of the research facility available in the other nation; as they can travel to that place for the study purpose having no issue of communication. In conclusion, the people over the globe, are using a single language. This will help to create uniformity and one can explore their skill by visiting various places. As per my opinion, this trend would help to curb many predicaments of an individual.
In this the contemporary world,
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people
are travelling to
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many
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places
of the universe. They were using a common
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language
as a result
that
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place
local
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language
will
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die
.
However
,
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some
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people
perceive whether this will
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reduce
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an innumerable of
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languages
in the universe would become a beneficial for
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people
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having
an easier life. I
strongly
support this view with arguments in below paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, the predominant reason is for
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having
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less
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languages
in the world would create the uniformity
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over
the cosmos. The
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people
who visit to various
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places
cannot
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have to
survive as the local community was able to understand unique
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language
.
Moreover
, due to this person are always ready to migrate to another country. As this will provide them more opportunities and can excel more in their career. Although,
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people
can manage in the new atmosphere, expands their social connection
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having
the ability to communicate.
For example
, Research conducted
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shows
that by using the same
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language
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over
the nation
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people
feel more comfortable and give more focus on their goals.

Furthermore
, the students can
also
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get
benefits from this. Most of the education institute was
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given
more focus on the
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study
of the second
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language
. As
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having
a single
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language
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over
the world, there is no need to
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study
the new
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language
.
Therefore
, the student can give more focus on the technical subjects. Even they can
also
expand their
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studies
by doing foreign visits
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having
no barrier of
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language
.
For instance
, the pupil can
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get
an advantage of the research facility available in the other nation; as they can travel to that
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place
for the
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study
purpose
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having
no issue of communication.

In conclusion
, the
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people
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over
the globe, are using a single
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language
. This will
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help
to create uniformity and one can explore their
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skill
by visiting various
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places
. As per my opinion, this trend would
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help
to curb
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many
predicaments of an individual.
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IELTS essay Every year serval languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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