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26. 09. 2017 In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are you opinions on this? v.1

26. 09. 2017 In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are you opinions on this? v. 1
It has been argued by someone that guests from other states should pursue local ways of life and attitudes of those lands because it makes more acceptable and more cosmopolitan to local people. Other individuals think that the host land should receive cultural diversity due to developing their country. This essay will delve into both aspects of these statements with relevant templates using some pieces of knowledge. To commence, visitors should have to maintain other cultures, especially when they are travelling for treatment, study, and business. This kind of attitude makes the guests more cosmopolitan and more acceptable to most people. As a result, the community of the host state draws grateful attention to visitors. Visitor people have so many things to learn about new cultures. If visitors people want to get more benefits from present nations, they must follow their dress code, food habit, languages, rituals, and religions. It will be easier for building a relationship with visitors by maintaining their culture. For example, recent research has shown successfully that 85 percent of visitors people maintain a local culture for their development. On the other hand, owner countries should welcome cultural diversity with cordially due to their progress in their country. Host countries should have to show sympathy for the visitors by arranging different festivals. Host countries should not show their conservative attitudes to visitors. As a result, tourists people feel free to visit their country and host people earn huge money for their country. Host countries will able to find the real talents of other countries by cultural diversity which directly connected to the improvement of the country. For instance, many developed countries like the U. S. A, the U. K, Australia, and Canada have emphasized cultural diversity in their development. I recapitulate, cultural diversification is an important issue in the 21st century and played a significant role in our society. However, visitors people should have to show proper respect for local ways of life whey they are visiting.
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been argued
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states should pursue
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ways of life and attitudes of those lands
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makes
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local
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people
.
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land should receive
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cultural
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diversity
due to developing their
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country
. This essay will delve into both aspects of these statements with relevant templates using
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some
pieces of knowledge.

To commence,
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visitors
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have to
maintain
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other
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cultures
,
especially
when they are travelling for treatment, study, and business. This kind of attitude
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makes
the guests more cosmopolitan and more acceptable to most
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people
.
As a result
, the community of the
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host
state draws grateful attention to
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visitors
.
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Visitor
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people
have
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things to learn about new
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cultures
. If
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visitors
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people
want to
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get
more benefits from present nations, they
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must
follow their dress code, food habit, languages, rituals, and religions. It will be easier for building a relationship with
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visitors
by maintaining their
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culture
.
For example
, recent research has shown
successfully
that 85 percent of
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visitors
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people
maintain a
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local
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culture
for their development.

On the
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other
hand, owner
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countries
should welcome
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cultural
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diversity
with
cordially
due to their progress in their
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country
.
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countries
should
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show
sympathy for the
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visitors
by arranging
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different
festivals.
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Host
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countries
should not
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show
their conservative attitudes to
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visitors
.
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people
feel free to visit their
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and
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host
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people
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country
.
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countries
will able to find the real talents of
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other
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countries
by
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cultural
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diversity
which
directly
connected to the improvement of the
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country
.
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,
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many
developed
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countries
like the U. S. A, the U. K, Australia, and Canada have emphasized
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cultural
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diversity
in their development.

I recapitulate,
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cultural
diversification is an
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important
issue in the 21st century and played a significant role in our society.
However
,
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visitors
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people
should
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have to
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show
proper respect for
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local
ways of life whey they are visiting.
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IELTS essay 26. 09. 2017 In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are you opinions on this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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