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The chart1 below shows information about d! tferent species of birds observed in Woodchuck County at different times of the year. v.2

The chart1 below shows information about d! tferent species of birds observed in Woodchuck County at different times of the year. v. 2
The chart shows a list of some of the species of birds that can be seen in Woodchuck County in two different seasons: winter and summer. Information is given about eight different species of birds. Three of the species listed-cardinals, crows, and woodpeckers-are observed in both summer and winter. That means that they are probably not migratory birds but live in the region all year. They can tolerate the winter weather in that area. Four of the species listed-bluebirds, mockingbirds, orioles, and vireos-are observed only in the summer. They are migratory birds that travel to Woodchuck County for their breeding season and spend the winter in another place where the weather is warmer. One species of bird-juncos-is seen in Woodchuck County in the winter but not in the summer. Perhaps it migrates farther north in the summer for its breeding season.
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some of the
species of birds that can be
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seen
in Woodchuck County in two
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different
seasons:
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winter
and
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summer
. Information is
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given
about eight
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different
species of birds.

Three of the species listed-cardinals, crows, and woodpeckers-
are observed
in both
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summer
and
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winter
. That means that they are
probably
not migratory birds
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but
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live
in the region all year. They can tolerate the
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winter
weather in that area. Four of the species listed-bluebirds, mockingbirds, orioles, and vireos-
are observed
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only
in the summer.

They are migratory birds that travel to Woodchuck County for their breeding season and spend the
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winter
in another place where the weather is warmer. One species of bird-juncos-is
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seen
in Woodchuck County in the
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winter
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but
not in the
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summer
. Perhaps it migrates farther north in the
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summer
for its breeding season.
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IELTS academic The chart1 below shows information about d! tferent species of birds observed in Woodchuck County at different times of the year. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
141 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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