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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

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The given pie charts illustrates the source of electricity which generated in Germany and France in 2009. Overall, they show the type of sources of energy and also the using portion of them. Firtstly look at the Germany. Germany used 560 billion kWh of energy during the 2009. For this consumption of energy the country used 3 main sources of energy. They used 59. 6% “Conventional Thermal”, 23% “Nuclear” and 17. 4% “Renewable” energy sources. About the renewable sources they used the “Biomass” source 39. 3%, “Wind” 36. 9%, “Hydroelectric” 17. 7%, “Solar” 6. 1% and so few percent (0. 0001%) geothermal sources of energy. About the France, they used 510 billion kWh of energy during the 2009. For this consumption of energy France also used 3 types of source of energy, but mainly they used “Nuclear” source of energy for 76%. Then at the second place “Renewable” energy for 13. 7% and the last one “Conventional Thermal” energy for 10. 3%. About the Renewable energy France used mainly “Hydroelectric” source of energy (for 80. 5%) for getting an electricity. Then in the second place “Wind’ for 10. 5% of energy source, in the third place “Biomass” for 8. 1% of energy source and the at the last the used “Solar” (0. 9%) and “Geothermal” (0. 00001%). They used solar energy source much more fewer than Germany. As a result of chart which given below, France used Nuclear source of energy much more than Germany. For renewable sources they used approximately same percent of resources. But separately using of renewable energies, Germany actually focused on “Biomass”, but France focused on “Hydroelectric” source of energy.
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