Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task and presents a clear opinion. However, the arguments could be developed further with more supporting evidence and examples.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word forms.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument but lacks smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs. Some sentences are disjointed, making it difficult to follow the overall flow.
Grammatical Range
There are several grammatical errors, including incorrect punctuation and sentence structure. The use of complex sentences is limited.