Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task and presents a clear opinion, but some points could be developed further. The conclusion summarizes the argument but lacks a strong final thought.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is generally appropriate, but there are instances of awkward phrasing and repetition. Some terms could be more precise.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument with a logical structure, but some ideas could be better connected. The use of cohesive devices is present but not always effective.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are errors in sentence construction and punctuation that affect clarity.