Task Achievement
The essay addresses both parts of the task effectively, providing relevant reasons and solutions. However, some points could be developed further.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, but there are instances of repetition and some phrases could be more sophisticated.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with a logical flow of ideas. However, some transitions between sentences could be smoother to enhance overall coherence.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a good command of grammar, but there are some errors in punctuation and sentence structure that affect clarity.