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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major infl v.34

Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major infl v. 34
At present the mobile phone is an attractive device among all sorts of people, conversely it has certain drawbacks too. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of smart device and provide a logical conclusion. Let us understand the reason why cellular phone is vital for folks. To begin with, the most convenient fact is communication development. It creates an opportunity to connect with the whole world within a second. As a result, public communicate with their friends and family members and build a strong relationship. For instance, messenger and Facebook are used by over 2. 5 billion people. Besides, the educational improvement is another positive point which cannot be disregarded as well. By using a cell phone students collect their lectures, books file from internet and share those with their classmates. On the other flip side of the coin, the mobile phones also have numerous major disadvantages as well. Firstly, the biggest obstacle is destroying culture because the young generation can easily influence by harmful websites. Therefore, they watch pornography, learn unusual behaviour, and bad stang. For example, in Bangladesh, over 54% persons visit blue film websites by mobile. Secondly, wasting time is another negative effect. According as, the pupils are using phones in their study time, which seriously affect their education. However, self- awareness and correct utilisation of mobile can reduce these disadvantages. To conclude, although the mobile phone can have a few harmful effects like degradation of culture and killing time, it has extremely positive influences on communication development and the educational improvement. I believe that, these benefits of the mobile phone outweigh its drawbacks.
At present the mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
is an attractive device among all sorts of
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people
,
conversely
it has certain drawbacks too. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of smart device and provide a logical conclusion.

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Let
us understand the reason why cellular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
is vital for folks. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, the most convenient fact is communication development. It creates an opportunity to connect with the whole world within a second.
As a result
, public communicate with their friends and family members and build a strong relationship.
For instance
, messenger and Facebook are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by over 2. 5 billion
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
Besides
, the educational improvement is another
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positive
point which cannot
be disregarded
as well
. By using a cell
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phone
students collect their lectures, books file from internet and share those with their classmates.

On the other flip side of the coin, the mobile
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phones
also
have numerous major disadvantages
as well
.
Firstly
, the biggest obstacle is destroying culture
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because
the young generation can
easily
influence by harmful websites.
Therefore
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
pornography, learn unusual
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behaviour
, and
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bad
Possible spelling mistake found.
stang
.
For example
, in Bangladesh, over 54% persons visit blue film websites by mobile.
Secondly
, wasting time is another
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negative
effect. According as, the pupils are using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
in their study time, which
seriously
affect their education.
However
, self- awareness and correct
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utilisation
of mobile can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
these disadvantages.

To conclude
, although the mobile
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phone
can have a few harmful effects like degradation of culture and killing time, it has
extremely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
influences on communication development and the educational improvement. I believe that, these benefits of the mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
outweigh its drawbacks.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major infl v. 34

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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