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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest? v.9

The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest? v. 9
The recent popularity of internet usage has caused significant changes in the way people consume and share information. There have been some problems associated with this like online theft and scams. However, the private and public sectors can work together to minimize the negative effects and allow us to enjoy the advantages of the internet. One of the first problems associated with internet usage comes from the fact that using the internet opens a door to the whole world. Some nefarious individuals can exploit this by masquerading as officials of a company or government to trick you into giving out private information like a bank account number, passport photo, or passwords to your account. These criminals can use this information to steal your money or blackmail your friends and family. Due to the severity of these crimes, it is important that the appropriate steps are taken to ensure that people have some protection when using the internet. Private sector companies could give warnings to all their customers that employees of their company will never ask for an account password. This alone would prevent many of these scams. Government around the world could be more active by creating a global online police force that tracks down the individuals perpetrating these crimes and putting them in jail. This would not only remove dangerous criminals from society but would discourage others from perpetrating crimes online. In summary, the internet is an amazing technological innovation that has transformed people's lives, but not without some negative impacts. However, it is my belief that if the right measures are taken by both businesses and governments, the internet can be made into a safe place for everyone.
The recent popularity of internet usage has caused significant
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changes
in the way
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people
consume and share information. There have been
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some
problems associated with this like online theft and scams.
However
, the private and public sectors can work together to minimize the
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negative
effects and
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allow
us to enjoy the advantages of the internet.

One of the
first
problems associated with internet usage
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comes
from the fact that using the internet opens a door to the whole world.
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Some
nefarious individuals can exploit this by masquerading as officials of a
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company
or
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government
to trick you into giving out private information like a bank account number, passport photo, or passwords to your account. These criminals can
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use
this information to steal your money or blackmail your friends and family.

Due to the severity of these crimes, it is
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important
that the appropriate steps
are taken
to ensure that
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people
have
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some
protection when using the internet. Private sector
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companies
could give warnings to all their customers that employees of their
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company
will never
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ask for
an account password. This alone would
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prevent
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many
of these scams.
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Government
around the world could be more active by creating a global online police force that
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tracks
down the individuals perpetrating these crimes and putting them in jail. This would not
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only
remove
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dangerous
criminals from society
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but
would discourage others from perpetrating crimes online.

In summary, the internet is an amazing technological innovation that has transformed
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people
's
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lives
,
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but
not without
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some
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negative
impacts.
However
, it is my belief that if the right measures
are taken
by both businesses and
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governments
, the internet can
be made
into a safe place for everyone.
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IELTS essay The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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