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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest? v.14

The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest? v. 14
The internet has become an important aspect of our life. When the internet came into existence, it brought a boom in the market. People were so shocked to see things they could do with the use of the internet. In the past, a postman used to deliver the letters to our dear ones which used to take lots of time, but over the internet we can email anyone sitting in any part of the world within seconds. We are able to connect to the entire world and share lots of information. However, there are many problems that occur because of the excessive use of the internet, first this essay will discuss about them There is no denying the fact that it is a great source of knowledge, but as per the old saying, "Too much of something is bad" it applies to the internet too. It contains all types of knowledge, bad and good. Some people use the internet to learn bad things, and those people become a threat to the nation. They use the internet to share vital data about a country's defence system and cause havoc by doing terror attacks. There should be proper monitoring of reports which are being shared. People use online payment gateways to send and receive money, these gateways are believed to be secure for online transactions, but sometime they get hacked by hackers. They are able to steal sensitive details such as credit card details then they misuse it by performing transactions. Many people have lost their money in online scams and hacks. We should pay more attention while making an online transaction, we should never share the OTP or pin with anybody. To sum up, the internet is wide like our universe. It has made the lives of human beings easy, but there are many problems that can occur because of it. People should be more focused while sharing information online. A simple email can become a nightmare if we don't pay attention to our actions while using the internet.
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aspect of our life. When the internet came into existence, it brought a boom in the market.
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were
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things they could do with the
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of the internet. In the past, a postman
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used
to deliver the letters to our dear ones which
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to take lots of time,
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over the internet we can email anyone
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in any part of the world within seconds. We are able to connect to the entire world and share lots of information.
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problems that occur
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of the excessive
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of the internet,
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this essay will
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discuss about them


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as per the
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it
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bad
and
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.
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the internet to learn
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things, and those
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become a threat to the nation. They
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use
the internet to share vital data about a country's
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defence
system and cause havoc by doing terror attacks. There should be proper monitoring of reports which are
being shared
.

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People
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use
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online
payment gateways to
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and receive money, these gateways
are believed
to be secure for
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online
transactions,
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sometime they
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get
hacked by hackers. They are able to steal sensitive
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details
such as credit card
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details
then they misuse it by performing transactions.
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Many
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people
have lost their money in
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online
scams and hacks. We should pay more attention while making an
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online
transaction, we should never share the OTP or pin with anybody.

To sum up, the internet is wide like our universe. It has made the
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lives
of human beings easy,
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but
there are
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many
problems that can occur
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because
of it.
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People
should be more focused while sharing information
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online
. A simple email can become a nightmare if we don't pay attention to our actions while using the internet.
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IELTS essay The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest? v. 14

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
338 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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