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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.7

Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. v. 7
These days, traffic congestion in many cities is indeed a major problem. In fact, according to a report, many countries across the world, lose a great amount of productive time due to clogged city roads. This coupled with rapidly increasing urbanization, the situation is expected to even worse unless acted upon. Therefore, I completely agree that people should be encouraged to live in areas with lesser population density. In this essay, I shall explain the reasons for my agreement with the given statement and provide necessary examples as required. To begin with, many cities across the world were built in the times when people used to commute to work by foot. However, the situation is quite different now, as many businesses have relocated their operations further away from urban centres, forcing people to commute to a longer distances than ever before, thus causing gridlocks. In the USA, for example, an average worker spends about ten days worth of time in traffic jams, which otherwise could be used for different purposes. Next, in many cities, due to centralised living, the city administration faces numerous problems related to transportation, particularly, during desperate times. However, this would not a case if the population is spread across the region. To explain, during emergency, patient transport can become difficult if roads are congested. As an example, in India, on the average speed of an ambulance is about 22 kilometres per hour, whereas, in Singapore, it is around 100 as the country restricts population density. In conclusion, as explained above, it is always recommended to decentralise communities in cities so that transit and transportation can be solved. Hence, I completely agree with the given statement and would recommend the local bodies to adopt the best practises from the globe while drafting their planning for the future.
These days, traffic congestion in
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cities
is
indeed
a major problem. In fact, according to a report,
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many
countries across the world, lose a great amount of productive
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time
due to clogged city roads. This coupled with
rapidly
increasing urbanization, the situation is
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expected
to even worse unless acted upon.
Therefore
, I completely
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agree
that
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people
should
be encouraged
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live
in areas with lesser population density. In this essay, I shall
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explain
the reasons for my agreement with the
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given
statement and provide necessary examples as required.

To
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begin
with,
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cities
across the world
were built
in the
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times
when
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people
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used
to commute to work by foot.
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, the situation is quite
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different
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now
, as
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businesses have relocated their operations
further
away from urban
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centres
, forcing
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people
to commute to a longer distances than ever
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before
,
thus
causing gridlocks. In the USA,
for example
, an average worker spends about ten days worth of
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time
in traffic jams, which
otherwise
could be
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used
for
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different
purposes.

Next
, in
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many
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cities
, due to
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centralised
living, the city administration faces numerous problems related to transportation,
particularly
, during desperate
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times
.
However
, this would not a case if the population
is spread
across the region. To
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explain
, during emergency, patient transport can become difficult if roads
are congested
. As an example, in India, on the average speed of an ambulance is about 22
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kilometres
per hour, whereas, in Singapore, it is around 100 as the country restricts population density.

In conclusion
, as
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explained
above, it is always
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recommended to decentralise
communities in
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cities
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so
that transit and transportation can
be solved
.
Hence
, I completely
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agree
with the
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given
statement and would recommend the local bodies to adopt the best
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practises
from the globe while drafting their planning for the future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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