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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside To what extent do you agree or disagree v.6

Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside v. 6
Introduction: Since many years ago, a lot of people have been deciding on a career path early and follow it as they grow up saying that it provides them with a satisfying life. However, while some many agree with this, changing jobs may suit others more. On the one hand, it can be said that following a career from early benefits us. Specifically, if we set an achievement for our careers in the early years of our life, we can prepare for it more than a lately set goal. For example, if a child wants to be a football player, he can prepare for it by focusing more on practicing the sport and working out rather than spending most of his time on academic works. As a result, this will help one do better when they start their jobs later. Which, in case of the boy, may lead to a better performance than the others in a try out for a professional team. On the other hand, an early work choice may disadvantage us as we grow. As an explanation for this, many of us change our hobbies and interests as we grow due to external factors which usually lead to a change of preference for or career. And when we change our preferences while we can change our jobs, it can lead to the unhappiness created by doing something we do not like. For instance, if someone is determined to become a doctor while she loves art, it can be annoying for her work in a field she is not interested in. Conclusion: Last but not least, the sense of achievement in a person’s life does not lie only in the pursuing of a particular career. It is also important to listen to ourselves when choosing a job in order to develop a satisfying career.
Introduction: Since
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many
years ago,
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a lot of
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people
have been deciding on a
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career
path
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early
and follow it as they grow up saying that it provides them with a satisfying life.
However
, while
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some
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many
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agree
with this, changing
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jobs
may suit others more.

On the one hand, it can
be said
that following a
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career
from
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early
benefits us.
Specifically
, if we set an achievement for our
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careers
in the
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early
years of our life, we can prepare for it more than a lately set goal.
For example
, if a child wants to be a football player, he can prepare for it by focusing more on practicing the sport and working out
rather
than spending most of his time on academic works.
As a result
, this will
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help
one do better when they
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start
their
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jobs
later. Which, in case of the boy, may lead to a better performance than the others in a try out for a professional team.

On the other hand
, an
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early
work choice may disadvantage us as we grow. As an explanation for this,
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many
of us
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change
our hobbies and interests as we grow due to external factors which
usually
lead to a
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change
of preference for or
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career
. And when we
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change
our preferences while we can
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change
our
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jobs
, it can lead to the unhappiness created by doing something we do not like.
For instance
, if someone
is determined
to become a doctor while she
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loves
art, it can be annoying for her work in a field she is not interested in.

Conclusion: Last
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but
not least, the sense of achievement in a person’s life does not lie
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only
in the pursuing of a particular
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career
. It is
also
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important
to listen to ourselves when choosing a
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job
in order to develop a satisfying
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career
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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