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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the country side. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.10

Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the country side. v. 10
It is thought that by staying people in metropolitan areas than villages could solve the problems of transportation. I strongly disagree with this point of view that traffic problems can be solved by gathering people in one area. Firstly, vacating the rural areas would be difficult for those people who has lived there since childhood. It is very tough to leave the home where you have lived for many years. Leaving that place just to solve the traffic problems would be an injustice to the inhabitants of suburbs. For instance, by moving the native peoples of suburbs will make them uncomfortable to absorb the urban community. Henceforth there shall be another way that could be solved for transportation problems. Secondly, villagers are the true reflection of any nations culture and values. Almost all of the cultural aspects are still preserved in these areas. Wiping the village life might create big problems for next the generations that may not be able to understand the real theme of their own culture which might lead them to lose their original identity. For example, people who had gathered in one place by leaving their original houses of the village has put them in the dilemma of uncomfortable life. To keep on the cultural values forever, there should be more benefits for rural communities. In conclusion, People who are living in the suburbs are very simple, original and peaceful that makes them difficult to live in a noisy place with diplomatic life. Also, they are symbolic of any nation's culture and its values.
It is
thought
that by staying
people
in metropolitan areas than villages could solve the
problems
of transportation. I
strongly
disagree with this point of view that traffic
problems
can
be solved
by gathering
people
in one area.

Firstly
, vacating the rural areas would be difficult for those
people
who
has
lived
there since childhood. It is
very
tough to
leave
the home where you have
lived
for
many
years. Leaving that place
just
to solve the traffic
problems
would be an injustice to the inhabitants of suburbs.
For instance
, by moving the native
peoples
of suburbs will
make
them uncomfortable to absorb the urban community.
Henceforth
there shall be another way that could
be solved
for transportation problems.

Secondly
, villagers are the true reflection of any nations culture and values. Almost
all of the
cultural aspects are
still
preserved in these areas. Wiping the village life might create
big
problems
for
next
the generations that may not be able to understand the real theme of their
own
culture which might lead them to lose their original identity.
For example
,
people
who had gathered in one place by leaving their original
houses
of the village has put them in the dilemma of uncomfortable life. To
keep
on the cultural values forever, there should be more benefits for rural communities.

In conclusion
,
People
who are living in the suburbs are
very
simple, original and peaceful that
makes
them difficult to
live
in a noisy place with diplomatic life.
Also
, they are symbolic of any nation's culture and its values.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the country side. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
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