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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or countryside. v. 1
The number of cars on the roads is increasing every day. Traffic and transportation issues are a growing concern in every major city. Many people believe that in order to solve traffic and transportation woes people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in the suburbs or countryside. I strongly disagree with this statement. In my opinion, there are several other ways to solve this issue. Firstly, encouraging people to live in the cities may have a detrimental effect on the population and environment. Overcrowding of the cities is a major issue in the world today. Also, cities are expensive and people may not have the funds necessary to reside in the city. Lack of good public transportation facilities is the prime reason for traffic congestion in cities, because this encourages people to use their own vehicles. In addition, poor traffic co-ordination especially during peak hours, repairing of roads and other problems slow vehicular movement. The government and civic authorities should increase the frequency of their public transportation services. In order to ensure public convenience and satisfaction, services should be scheduled in a timely manner. It is also important to ensure the quality of roads and to eliminate bottlenecks which hamper traffic flow. Organizations should provide transport facilities for staff who travel long distances. Carpooling is the best way to mitigate traffic woes and individuals should be encouraged to do this. To conclude, there are a number of solutions to traffic and transportation woes. The government and the people should work hand in hand to combat this issue.
The number of cars on the roads is increasing every day.
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Traffic
and
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transportation
issues are a growing concern in every major city.
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Many
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people
believe that in order to solve
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traffic
and
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transportation
woes
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people
should
be encouraged
to
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live
in
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cities
rather
than in the suburbs or countryside. I
strongly
disagree with this statement. In my opinion, there are several other ways to solve this issue.

Firstly
, encouraging
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people
to
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live
in the
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cities
may have a detrimental effect on the population and environment. Overcrowding of the
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cities
is a major issue in the world
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today
.
Also
,
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cities
are expensive and
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people
may not have the funds necessary to reside in the city. Lack of
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good
public
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transportation
facilities is the prime reason for
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traffic
congestion in
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cities
,
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because
this encourages
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people
to
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use
their
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own
vehicles.
In addition
, poor
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traffic
co-ordination
especially
during peak hours, repairing of roads and other problems slow vehicular movement.

The
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government
and civic authorities should increase the frequency of their public
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transportation
services. In order to ensure public convenience and satisfaction, services should
be scheduled
in a timely manner. It is
also
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important
to ensure the quality of roads and to eliminate bottlenecks which hamper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
flow. Organizations should provide transport facilities for staff who travel long distances. Carpooling is the best way to mitigate
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traffic
woes and individuals should
be encouraged
to do this.

To conclude
, there are a number of solutions to
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traffic
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
woes. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should work hand in hand to combat this issue.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or countryside. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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