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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.23

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. v. 23
In Some people opinion increasing number of sports facilities will be the best way to improve public health while remaining says that it could only have a minute effect and further more precaution measurements are also required. This essay agrees that by providing a large number of sports facilities will be the concrete step towards the betterment of public health. This essay will discuss both points of view. It is cleared by the doctors and research that Sound body has a sound mind. Therefore, it is the key responsibility of every state and government to provide proper facilities to the public so that they can improve their living habits and add proper exercise in daily routine by involving their self in different sports. Physical activity helps to burn calories and risk of heart attack can be reduced. In 2018, a report published by "National Tv" stated that ratio of illness and sickness is low as compared to those who are not involved in any sports activity. However, in addition to the above, by providing all sports facilities does not guarantee that everyone can be physically fit. State or government should take concrete steps in order to ensure that the maximum number of people can utilize these facilities. Awareness regarding the sport's importance in Peron health can be spread through social media or Tv Channels. In my opinion, I believed that by providing different sports facilities can help humanity in maintaining the healthy life by effective utilization of those and take out time from out busier life. However, government should be keen enough to provide awareness about sports.
In
Some
people
opinion increasing number of
sports
facilities will be the best way to
improve
public health while remaining says that it could
only
have a minute effect and
further
more precaution measurements are
also
required. This essay
agrees
that by providing
a large number of
sports
facilities will be the concrete step towards the betterment of public health. This essay will discuss both points of view.

It
is cleared
by the doctors and research that Sound body has a sound mind.
Therefore
, it is the key responsibility of every state and
government
to provide proper facilities to the public
so
that they can
improve
their living habits and
add
proper exercise in daily routine by involving their self in
different
sports
. Physical activity
helps
to burn calories and
risk
of heart attack can be
reduced
. In 2018, a report published by
"
National
Tv
"
stated that ratio of illness and sickness is low as compared to those who are not involved in any
sports
activity.

However
,
in addition
to the above, by providing all
sports
facilities does not guarantee that everyone can be
physically
fit. State or
government
should take concrete steps in order to ensure that the maximum number of
people
can utilize these facilities. Awareness regarding the sport's importance in Peron health can
be spread
through social media or
Tv
Channels.

In my opinion, I believed that by providing
different
sports
facilities can
help
humanity in maintaining the healthy life by effective utilization of those and take out time from out busier life.
However
,
government
should be keen
enough
to provide awareness about
sports
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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